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Jack
3/4/21, 6:47 AM
I'm interested to see where this story goes. I'm always a sucker for a good romance.
AAA
3/4/21, 6:16 AM
I read it as a story I had to think about, and it wasn't until after the demonstration that I engaged with it as porn, by that point I'd gotten a bit more practiced at translating the dialect, and there was less of it. Very hot transformation btw.
3/4/21, 5:02 AM
Keep writing, this was super hot, I'll keep reading and wanking
3/4/21, 4:20 AM
I haven't read much of this chapter yet because I got pulled out by a continuity error: in Ch. 1, Tim's Dad was a Marine, but then Ch. 2 opens with Tim and Oliver being army brats. Going to keep reading though cuz Ch. 1 was way hot! Edit: Ch. 2 was just as hot, though whose cock was in whose cunt got a little mixed up in the hottest parts. I bet this was your plan all along, to make me get turned on by continuity errors. You fiend! 🤯
3/4/21, 3:26 AM
What kind of robosexual am I that I was aroused by this story? 🤖 I was never good at video games, but I loved it when my straight buddies would invite me over to smoke weed and watch them play. I only have a vague recollection of Mega Man, but apparently enough to understand the "Noun" Man structure, and his ability to copy other's abilities made the malware transfer easier to imagine as being administered via Mega Man's upgraded mega dick into his brothers' various ports.
3/4/21, 2:35 AM
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Anonymous
3/4/21, 1:12 AM
Chiming in to agree that the dialect is (for me) totally unreadable. I wouldn't overthink it, but moving forward you can just say they have an accent and the reader can do the rest.
3/4/21, 1:08 AM
Love this series, can't wait to see where it goes. The fetishes, the compulsions, the mysterious Master -- extremely hot, one of my favorites on here.
3/4/21, 12:40 AM
Such a hot chapter! I'm really enjoying this series.
3/4/21, 12:02 AM
Echoing the above comments - There's a difference between including Scottish slang words and trying to translate an accent. Hell, Scots have a lot of different accents that aren't even understandable to other Scots! Since your first chapter was about baseball players, I assumed your setting is in the US or Canada and either place a cop needs to be able to speak clearly in the dialect of the general population. Frankly, this at best is cringy and at worst borders on "racist" (there isn't a good term for ethnic nationalistic belittlement). I'd enjoy seeing that mirror transform men into furry, bearded guys found in other nationalities - Dominican, Middle Eastern, South Asian, Italian, North African, Slavic - but this kinda has me worried. Lewis is saying stuff that moves the story forward and he's nearly impossible to figure out which pulls me right out of an otherwise provocative, hot read. Good storytelling needs to be understood by the reader unless going you're going for an Anthony Burgess alternative language vibe (ala A Clockwork Orange) which I don't otherwise see in your writing choices. If Riley can understand Lewis, then we need to. If he can't, then we need to know that. And if Riley is growing to understand Lewis better as his transformation moves forward, we need to know that too.