Recent Comments

2/17/21, 12:58 PM
Incredible. I'm a fan of muscle theft. Yet, you've provided quite a convincing parallel thrill. He's useless as a powerful man.... and a mere boy for daddy. Most excellent.
Fred
2/17/21, 9:55 AM
yes pleas make a following capture
2/17/21, 7:02 AM
A Great ReVision!
2/17/21, 6:21 AM
exciting! can't wait to see what happens
Anonymous
2/17/21, 5:20 AM
I would encourage you to break up your longer paragraphs. Particularly during the transformation portions, where it quickly became a wall of text that became too difficult to follow. At the very least, every time someone else says something, make a new paragraph. Apart from that, this idea is cool, and I'd like to see where this goes.
2/17/21, 5:13 AM
I really liked this! I think it was smart to start the story in the middle of Eric's transformation. I just had some trouble buying the premise that this physical and mental transformation has been going on for months, and neither Eric nor his gymrat roommate Justin noticed there was something different about him until just now.
2/17/21, 4:44 AM
That was so hot.
2/17/21, 4:33 AM
Loved this first chapter! I look forward to more.
2/17/21, 4:15 AM
There's got to be more to this story.
2/17/21, 3:33 AM
Fuckin' great idea, Man! Couldn't stop reading it till I finished.