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nycboot
2/14/21, 11:37 PM
Hehe....it's always amusing but a great-tension inducing thing to have the audience recognize things the protagonist is unable to see. :) Very nice start.
Feb 14, 2021
Anonymous
2/14/21, 9:29 PM
Spectacular!!!
Fred
2/14/21, 9:27 PM
i live to serve virus
2/14/21, 9:26 PM
Hi. Do you have a new chapter in the works? We'd love to see this story continue please 😃
2/14/21, 5:41 PM
You're so good at writing sex scene ! It's really hot. Thanks !
2/14/21, 4:47 PM
Hot hot hot. Loving this.
Mindwhisperer
2/14/21, 3:38 PM
There is an old saying about details. For me it is the little details that can make or break a story. For example this one begins with this: "You see, a CEO recently was abducted by my team. He was developing a mind control app for a phone . . . I had my team thwart his plans. It took a long time to get the correct candidates to capture him. I had to send my team out to invade an entire fraternity just to get him into our lab." Upon reading this I couldn't help but wonder, WTF?!, why would anyone have to invade or even involve himself with a *fraternity* in order to snatch a *CEO*? A CEO conjurs up one image, fraternity a complete opposite.
Jack
2/14/21, 3:04 PM
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!
Anonymous
2/14/21, 2:53 PM
Hot, hot, hot. You've given them remote controlled dicks.