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2/7/21, 11:29 PM
Yesss can't wait for the third part!
Feb 7, 2021
2/7/21, 11:26 PM
Outstanding writing!
2/7/21, 9:24 PM
This is a really good start to a bigger story. The characters and setting are well fleshed out while also leaving enough room for future writers to interpret how ever they see fit, so over all, very well written. Thinking about writing a chapter myself. With that being said, I do have a couple of questions I'd like to ask to get some ideas on how I want to continue the story, when I manage to find the time to write. First off, when coming up with the M.E.D.S device did you have any limitations in mind for what it can/can't do? Specifically the physical button, would Ben be able to change the teachers' hair color and length, make him younger, add extra limbs; or is he only able to make more realistic changes like gain 6 bls of muscle in a single week, increase skin sensitivity, or loose any/all bladder control? Last question, is the main setting of this story in high school or college?
Feb 7, 2021
nycboot
2/7/21, 9:08 PM
Interesting. I apologize for being critical - take it as criticism to improve your writing, not as personal comment. As for the end - I find my mind filling in the gaps that are unclear. Presumably Beta-18 is Jake and Alpha-38 is the uncle. But it's not clear to me that they would have any recollection of the laboratory scene. So why would the revelation that the uncle is really the dad (at least that's what I think that dialogue implies) matter in any sexual manner?
Anonymous
2/7/21, 8:00 PM
Just keeps getting better with each installment. Such fun!
2/7/21, 7:55 PM
the lost story is back! thank you for continuing this gem!
2/7/21, 7:19 PM
hope you do more to this story, I love it.
2/7/21, 7:10 PM
hope to hear more of this, loved it
2/7/21, 6:00 PM
loved the story, it was rather hotttt. Can't wait for more.