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boi98229
2/7/21, 12:24 AM
Really good plot and character development. Horribly intriguing and arousing in a disturbing kind of way. i suppose it is the sense of control exhibited by Fraynes that make the story both engaging and arousing. i thought the hypnotic conversation Fraynes use to subdue Flake's misgivings in the van was very believable, which drew me even more into the story and Flake's mindset. Fraynes is obviously both intelligent and alert as well as sadistic and immoral. He seems very knowledgeable in hypnosis, drugs, and other psychological mind control techniques. As such he makes a great mind control expert and rather evil antagonist. i would have been very pleased to see the story carry on from here! Sadly at this point in time this doesn't seem likely.
2/6/21, 11:46 PM
Nice work. Thanks for sharing it with us!
2/6/21, 10:36 PM
This was a lot of fun. Beat-for-beat, it followed the formula very well. My only criticism is with the dog. The poor thing disappears about halfway through the story. It was like she got in the way of what the author wanted to do and he sent her packing! I think the inference is that the dog (on some level) understood what was happening to the protagonist and set out to find a better opportunity, but I still didn't dig it. I gotta tell ya, I'd be upset with my dogs if they just split while I was in the middle of an alien transformation! After all that kibble! Good job, man! Anxious to read more.
2/6/21, 8:38 PM
dick move Tiny, Dick move
2/6/21, 7:21 PM
thanks GM for the installment it's all coming together and I can't wait to see how you bring the final chapters together relz.
2/6/21, 7:09 PM
again love
boi98229
2/6/21, 6:57 PM
Sweet. Nice that Mattie finally found someone who was caring, supportive, and gay!
2/6/21, 6:47 PM
hot story! hope that theres more to come!
boi98229
2/6/21, 6:42 PM
Nice plot setup and character development. Looking forward to reading the next chapter. Thanks!
Jul 2, 2020
2/6/21, 6:29 PM
I just love everything you write.