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2/1/21, 6:21 AM
Amazing! Please more!
2/1/21, 5:22 AM
I don't know who is worse; Mathew for castrating his boyfriend or the uncle for doing the same to him. I liked the original series but this paints it with a much darker brush.
Daniel
2/1/21, 3:05 AM
not my favorite dude, but you know you are ! I.J.S.
Daniel
2/1/21, 2:54 AM
let's see where it goes dude I.J.S.
2/1/21, 1:32 AM
looking forward to the next chapter!
Art
1/31/21, 11:50 PM
Great story! I'd love to see even more buildup, some more time with the descent into hypno slave, in the next one. But otherwise really nicely done!
1/31/21, 11:34 PM
Classic Cockatrice. You're a natural with inanimate-TF concepts Good character interaction, and Jeremry's unfurling during the 'dates' was good stuff and fun reading. I felt the lore schpeel at the beginning was unnecessarily long and deep (that's what she said). Once you've established the lore to your own satisfaction, a synopsis of it in-story, for the reader, will usually suffice I find. It's not a fatal error; I just had to think of a criticism to balance out the ass kissing.
Anonymous
1/31/21, 11:19 PM
Not sure if this was intended to be more of a story or a testimonial, but either way it slightly missed the mark for me You spend a lot of time saying that things were good or got you excited, but you never really delve into *why* that was. Given that it’s all written in the first person I’d have loved to have heard more about what thoughts and emotions are (or aren’t) going through your head at each point That said, you’ve clearly got passion and your writing style makes it easy to read so I’m looking forward to seeing what you try writing next
1/31/21, 10:46 PM
These first two chapters have left me nice and hard, which terrifies me for the upcoming two. Sigh. Thanks a lot.