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1/31/21, 5:13 PM
But are you positive Rocco has everyone.......
1/31/21, 5:01 PM
Wow. Scary and hot and slow burn. Great story and I’m excited to read the rest. I love all of the little details mentioned already. Very well done.
1/31/21, 4:29 PM
Are there any politically themed stories where the person goes red to blue, or conservative to more liberal? Don't get me wrong, i love these erotically terrifying stories where someone becomes another cog in the machine (or assimilates into one ideal).
Scott
1/31/21, 1:37 PM
Really alluring and fascinating story. hope more coned soon.
Anonymous
1/31/21, 1:12 PM
Well, that certainly didn’t end the way I expected it to! Really looking forward seeing what you do in the next (and final?) part now that Rocco seems to have control over all of the key players
1/31/21, 12:57 PM
first time i read it i couldnt understand it. now i do
Whitewolf78
1/31/21, 12:25 PM
Loved it!!!! Still holding out hope for a sequel!!
1/31/21, 12:24 PM
Thanks, Feed Your Head! You know, I used the phrase "Fascist wet dream" at one point in the 1st chapter, and that's exactly what this story is about. On one level, it does play out like a very sexy erotic dream, but on another level it's a cautionary tale about the seductive allure of certain Fascist ideologies and iconographies, And it's only going to get sexier/scarier in the next two parts!
1/31/21, 12:15 PM
There's that beautiful pull between sexy and terrifying that you do so well, Hypnothrill! The descriptions of buff blond shirtless guys all over the place is smoldering, but the undercurrent of right-wing philosophy is stronger (the copaganda of "Police get whatever they want" is particularly chilling, as is "good-looking white guys don't have to follow the rules"). And poor, poor Nick. I think he knows he's doomed at this point, and there's no escape--and what's worse he has to watch the rest of the world burn down while he's the only one who sees the fire. Poor guy...
Jul 6, 2015
Whitewolf78
1/31/21, 11:57 AM
first off, I loved the concept. Especially from today's prospective where we are all home alone playing video games and online most of the time. I agree at times it felt repetitive, but personally for me it made it seem more real. I can think of many games out there where i have had to re-do the same level or mission over and over again. So i think that helped bring that feeling across. The only thing i feel was not clear was how Brian knew that Jason was playing now, and was it his plan all along to get bis friend addicted? Sequel wise, I feel you could go two ways; One do a sort of prologue, possibly not fully explaining (after all the mystery of it is half the fun) but giving us readers a slightly more understanding as to what the game is and why it is built this way. Then for an actual sequel maybe set it in lockdown, at a University Dorm. Where one person brings or buys the game to pass time and due to the lockdown ends up using it and bit by bit his fellow dorm mates also fall under the sway of the game? Obviously you don't have to they are just my thoughts. But either way loved the story it's amazing and definitely one of the best on here!!