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Jul 6, 2015
Whitewolf78
1/31/21, 11:57 AM
first off, I loved the concept. Especially from today's prospective where we are all home alone playing video games and online most of the time. I agree at times it felt repetitive, but personally for me it made it seem more real. I can think of many games out there where i have had to re-do the same level or mission over and over again. So i think that helped bring that feeling across. The only thing i feel was not clear was how Brian knew that Jason was playing now, and was it his plan all along to get bis friend addicted? Sequel wise, I feel you could go two ways; One do a sort of prologue, possibly not fully explaining (after all the mystery of it is half the fun) but giving us readers a slightly more understanding as to what the game is and why it is built this way. Then for an actual sequel maybe set it in lockdown, at a University Dorm. Where one person brings or buys the game to pass time and due to the lockdown ends up using it and bit by bit his fellow dorm mates also fall under the sway of the game? Obviously you don't have to they are just my thoughts. But either way loved the story it's amazing and definitely one of the best on here!!
Anonymous
1/31/21, 11:21 AM
excellent
1/31/21, 9:48 AM
Great start! I like how you write.
Somnus
1/31/21, 9:41 AM
You're making me look forward to Monday!
Anonymous
1/31/21, 9:18 AM
excellent work...really enjoyable!!
1/31/21, 9:04 AM
Great story. Can't wait for the next chapters.
1/31/21, 8:05 AM
I'm excite for the end of this, when all the Chads cum together. It has similar vibes to your previous story Slipy Slope, so I have a feeling of where this will go. Thanks for the great build up, and I'm excited to see where this will go.
1/31/21, 6:51 AM
I'm soo excited for the next chapter!!! Keep them coming please!
Jan 30, 2021
1/31/21, 4:59 AM
sequel idea expand to there lessons and then to there home