Recent Comments

1/26/21, 2:03 PM
Chapter 2 was a worthy successor to your first pinball story. I love the new bonus, and it leaves Chapter 3 primed for the machine to do some *mental* rewiring of the next visitor to the arcade.
1/26/21, 1:58 PM
Very, Very Hot.
Jan 18, 2021
Cracker
1/26/21, 1:57 PM
While that might be a hot story, it has no relevance to this story. There are stories on that theme here in this site. :)
1/26/21, 1:30 PM
Thanks Man, I Love this!
1/26/21, 1:30 PM
cannt wait to read more
boi98229
1/26/21, 12:02 PM
Maybe i just feel the pleasure of a submissive addicted to hypnosis, but i didn't find the control of the twins creepy nor did i feel any of the characters betrayed anyone else. It seemed to be that there was good communication, well-intentioned friendship, and informed consent at every step. As much as i enjoy being hypnotized, i don't believe that hypnotic control is consistently so strong that a subject would not be able to make a conscious decision to leave such a group. In any case, i don't have the impression that the twins had a desire to control their friends to that extent. Actually it would not have occurred to me to even express this perspective if i hadn't already read the comments above and felt the need to express a different reaction to the story. While i don't think betrayal was part of this story or intended to be, like EntrancedGay92, i do find hypnosis and betrayal are hot themes in stories intended as erotic fantasy. i thought every aspect of the story hot as hell! i enjoyed the characters and the way the plot brought them all together. i thought the pace of development and length of the story was fine, though personally when i like a story this much i would be even happier if it were a full novel! Personally i would love to meet all these guys, and live in that kind of all male hierarchical household. Thanks for sharing!
1/26/21, 11:56 AM
Our Army will surely return. You will see.
1/26/21, 10:21 AM
interesting concept
Jan 24, 2021
1/26/21, 7:35 AM
Ahhh I figured this was a book adaption, nice work! One of my favourite books I had to read was “In Lucia’s eyes” about Casanova. But it might not be as refreshing haha
1/26/21, 7:31 AM
Great work, I always enjoy stories in which a guy's fashion sense is improved, particularly when that leans to jockstraps, and showing off their bodies. Hoping that theme continues. And it's also great to see the guys starting to spontaneously trigger each other. Keep it up.