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Anon
2/1/25, 3:07 AM
Yousef I think is very fascinating in how he’s becoming arguably because his narrative of being a seer aligns perfectly with his namesake- who was a scrier of dreams. Arguably, his love for Luna and balancing that with religious tradition is in my eyes somewhat comparable to the tale of Zuleikha- the infamous Wife of Potiphar. In muslim tradition- particularly amongst Sufis- her obsession over Yusuf is cast as true love- in truth love of the divine as that is what Yusuf reflects in his beauty- which quickly spirals into near mania but eventually saves her- and the two as having known each other well, which coupled with her generally shoddy marriage to Potiphar (the man is understood to have been a eununch in some readings and was generally…not really putting it out much- some jewish accounts argue he had the hots for Yusuf just as much as his wife.- leads her down a dark path of betraying her marriage, the man she does love by getting him thrown in prison to assert her own autonomy and assauge her hurt- seeing rejection as alignment with her neglectful husband and thus an endorsement of her own martial neglect, and other matters of plotting, but after long years of suffering alone, eventually makes the move to confess what she did to see the man she loved released from prison because she did use the power she had to harm him, regardless of her feelings or circumstances. Much like how Luna causes feelings of rapture in the weres, muslim accounts often highlight that Zuleikha held a feast where she invited those noblewomen who spoke against her love for Yusuf seeking to raise their own station in comparison to hers to show that her actions were hardly unreasonable- giving them fruit and knives so as to cut said fruit and eat. Quick as a whirl, she sends Yusuf in for a brief moment (likely to pass some fruit in- her husband wouldn’t have left him along with her for long after her earlier seduction attempt)- and the women are so raptured by his beauty they cut their hands with their knives, feeling no pain in the process, hailing him as divine in his beauty and not simply human- though he was. These accounts are also present in the Sefer HaYasher- a collection of jewish exegesis. The question becomes what will Yousef’s love for his new state of being lead him to- will it allow him to retain his connection to his family- or will it drive them away like Zuleikha drove away Yusuf? And like her…if that happens will he get the chance to fix that if he does do this? And if not…what then? Something tells me Tom is about to face a rather nasty set of consequences. Larry’s feelings may be right on the mark. Tom may have seen him leaving as protecting his family- and while that may be true- other people can certainly think of things differently. Tom’s daughter may want nothing to do with him or to even want to see him, potentially seeing his absence as the ultimate betrayal to her and her loved ones. I hope Tom isn’t too crushed by this- or that he winds up in Ruiz’s orbit afterwards- but that is up to how things go. As for familiars, I find in intriguing how you have placed them as being enchanted/befuddled in line with the horror aspect. With the jinn, two types are known- willingly and unwillingly. Both are present in the reign of Suleiman (Solomon). Islamic tradition has Solomon using shayatin (demons- malicious jinns) to build structures such as possibly even the first temple, dive and likely find pearls or riches from the sea, and do mining projects. Similar traditions are found in the Testament of Solomon and the Gittin tractate of the Talmud- the former mentioning an assortment of demons who labored under Solomon due to possessing his signet ring granted to him by - the shape of the ring is said to contain a hexagram in many readings particularly in the East- while western tradition took the shape to be that of a pentagram (I am more familiar with the hexagram shape)- the flag of Morocco’s star is said to represent it- but has carried other meanings such as the five pillars of Islam amongst other things. The Gittin in particular makes mention of the infamous Asmodeous (Ashmedai)- commonly seen as a demon of lust (this view seems to come from the Book of Tobit)- who was said to have gotten Solomon’s ring for himself, impersonated him for 40 days and saw Solomon needing to reclaim his throne. Asmodeus was said to have been imprisoned and thrown into a stone box or a urn of some sort into the ocean, sealed up. From that end of his did he gain the arabic name of Sakhr- the rock. He was often identified with certain scriptural passages by muslim views of a body being put on Solomon’s throne as a trial, and reported on in exegesis. Later medieval tradition also saw muslims working with jinns- some distinguishing between using the divine to control jinns, or being led around by them to evil ends. The Shams al Marif is a common example of a grimoire from the time period. Some famous jurists- like Al Tabasi of Nishapur who I've talked about before. Tabasi was also known for the creation of a treatise on dealing with jinns himself- al-Shāmil fī al-baḥr al-kāmil- The Comprehensive Compendium to the Entire Sea, distinguishing between licit and prohibited magical acts. Treatises on oneiromancy are also well known in muslim circles- and dream reading remains a distinctly practiced thing- with Yousef being a seer- I can see him making connections between himself and what he remembers of the story of Joseph. As for willing servants from the jinn, these found positions of high honor- in his armies and in his councils. While Paul likely will wind up a familiar- something tells me his fate isn’t going to be a simple as becoming a compliant little asset. There’s more there. After all, this part of the novella is about mates- but mates in were context typically means well...the equivalent of a spouse. Really, the concept of familiars and the like I think will be something Bill may wind up dipping his toe into possibly, though we first have to see what is going down with Paul.
2/1/25, 3:06 AM
I agree with Daniel. I love the basic premise but this reads a little like an outline for a story rather than a fully developed story. The devil is in the details!! Let your imagination run wild!!
Anon
2/1/25, 2:03 AM
I think much like how the jinn can sometimes have wildly different understandings of things- we see something similar with the weres. All species generally desire a means to reproduce- and weres are likely no exception. Mondjugen serve that function of reproduction- as well as ensuring clans don’t destabilize and fall apart. In that sense, taking the isolation approach is not only efficient, but avoids too many complications- Pete’s method is exactly what got Agent Al on their case- ironically if they had used this method as they are now Al probably would still be human. But it also means any mondjugens caught will…probably have very few chance of getting out without becoming weres. I also find it intriguing how it’s seen as saving mondjugen to make them were- but this is likely moreso about saving the clans from dying out- weres can’t really biologically reproduct and are thus left dependent on the mondjugen system- as we see with that app. It’s likely they can access date of birth records and calculate lunar cycles to determine targets. Which is very chilling as it implies weres are in positions of great power in human society- though weather they are good or not at their job can vary- Bush is typically seen as being not that great in the long run in terms of geopolitics, despite Pete’s adulation of him. Honestly a were trying to navigate human politics or organizations while keeping themselves moving is an intriguing thought experiment- we know there are weres in the church- amish weres…there’s a lot of intriguing elements at play in the woodwork. Ironically, as chilling as the isolation system is- it’s probably the least eerie way to ensure species survival and reduced collatoral damage. But for every mondjugen that is made, families are likely separated in the process, and there is absolutely a very dark aspect to their actions that doesn’t square up entirely with typical human actions- that is for sure. Weres may see this all as a sign they don’t really need to care about human morality at all- but well…as much as the weres are wolf- they are still men. The fact that they don’t want to fully become wolf all the time- seeing it as a horror and punishment- is proof of that. For all that they may see humanity as a curse and weakness…they know if there are no humans- they are no mondjugen- and no weres. For all that they desire to stay away from humans and see them as potentially lesser- they know full well that they are dependent on them. It’s likely historically places where humans were wiped out by war or plague likely saw werewolves needing to migrate or died out as they lost potential mondjugens to replace their numbers. They can proclaim their superiority over humans all day and night- and perhaps they are right in a way- but at the end of the day they likely know full well that they are dependent on humans- like it or not- in some form. Distancing themselves entirely from humans even as Ruiz wants will always remain a fantasy unless they escape into the woods- and they will never do that, save for a few of them. But then again…interacting only amongst themselves is as close as one can get to that. But even considering the less damaging aspects of isolating targets- there still is horror there. They may have no choice but do this in order to boost their numbers and well…survive the deadly games of werewolf politics and the like- but for those turned- great are the costs, and great is the fear. I may have said it before, but I honestly suspect Mahmood is praying two units of prayer any chance he can get and supplication- it’s a tradition done by those who feel they may die- and was done by some martyred figures in muslim history. Essentially, a dead man’s prayer. That and praying for his son, and fearing these clearly inhuman jinn who seek to enchant him with sihr (arabic for black magic- the word seems to derive from Ugraitic- from saharu- meaning malovelent magic- though the word sihr usually is associated with all magic- though historically that has varied, for wicked ends- reminding him of those who were kidnapped, tortured and killed in Lebanon during it’s civil war. For the weres this may be a usual process leading to a happy baptism- but for Mahmood this is likely his worst nigthmare made flesh- now he knows Ray’s warnings have come true- and Ray is too out of his mind to even talk to- and worry and fear for his son likely pervade him now. The fact this is all happening unbeknownst to Yousef is really what makes this horrifying. The coming full moon is not going to be pretty for him in the least. His worst fear is about to come to fruition. It’s a bit like watching an accident in slow motion.

Anonymous
2/1/25, 2:19 AM
@[Anon](/user/show/10049352) Bro wrote a whole other story in the story’s comments 😭
Willie Cici
2/1/25, 2:16 AM
I'm loving this series. Keep going.
Zander
2/1/25, 12:05 AM
I wonder if the King of the Prince's Father will also become a slave of the Orc Tuxnox. It seems clear why, the Orc saved the Prince's life, perhaps he reminds him of the Prince's Grandfather. And if so, then the Prince's Father will be even more similar, probably he will also want to turn the King into his sex slave).
1/31/25, 9:53 PM
Great line: "suck it like you mean it".
1/31/25, 5:35 AM
Oh, this was lovely.

1/31/25, 8:51 PM
@[NayarLeng](/user/show/10045868) Thank you very much for your praise ! ^^
1/31/25, 8:13 PM
Story is so good. Can’t wait to see what Venom has planned for Bret next!
1/31/25, 6:03 PM
I’ve been intrigued by this series. I remain skeptical of AI in the creative fields but this has been the best story for me so far. Perhaps because the personalities involved are so distinct, the transition so linear and the inclusion of more overly sexual elements.
Anonymous
12/4/24, 4:56 PM
My gods this is fecking thrilling I need more. Although small feedback though. It kinda took me out that Billy isn't fiddling with the code. Felt a little "easy" for him to just ask Zach. I can't wait for the next one though gahhhhhhhh pls thank you for this series

12/5/24, 10:19 PM
@Anonymous Yeah, I wasn't too happy with it, either, honestly. But I felt the need to figure out a way to make writing this easier for myself and also a way to differentiate different "types" of reprogramming. It'll hopefully make a bit more sense in the coming chapters. ;)

Anonymous
1/31/25, 5:38 PM
@[Flaren](/user/show/10029367) Are you still doing updates for this story?