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1/25/21, 7:31 PM
Very, hot! This reminds me of some of Webb025's old stories, specifically "Jockmaster." Great stuff, I please continue!
1/25/21, 7:23 PM
Yep. That is the plan. It's about 1/2....maybe 2/3 finished. And I think I'm going to save the Ex for a third installment. I just hate being super long with the stories 😅
1/25/21, 7:14 PM
so, if I'm getting it right, the detective will became and african-american power bottom and the scientist will be an asian submise top?
Jan 25, 2021
Anonymous
1/25/21, 6:59 PM
The writing and idea are decent. Descriptions might benefit from slightly more detail. I struggle with the plot - the protagonist is, in my view, an entitled jerk, who gets everything he wants not through effort or self-actualisation, but convenient happenstance. Both the object of his lust, and their partner, are drawn into this as props, with neither putting up resistance or objecting to this happening. Was this a conscious choice on your part, to write them like this?
1/25/21, 6:39 PM
I see, I agree with the new races
Jan 25, 2021
1/25/21, 5:48 PM
Well, well done for a first or even 20th attempt. I would like to see a sequel. Maybe Sven popping up in his mind. It would be a shame if someone who loved was deleted rather than integrating as well.
starvagon
1/25/21, 5:46 PM
Hot story! Can't wait for the next chapter.
1/25/21, 5:34 PM
i thought about a Fat Tony cameo -- as well as a cameo of one of the chap 2 coaches -- but I couldn't make it work. Let's just suppose they were victims of the Supply War ...
1/25/21, 5:16 PM
Yes. At first he was going to be a security guard to the scientist, but I've changed him to a private detective for the SAS church.
1/25/21, 4:42 PM
Please continue if ever, i like it with unaware teacher