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Joe
1/21/21, 11:55 AM
great story! love all the inductions and enslavements. thank you for writing and sharing
1/21/21, 11:17 AM
Loved the unique premise and the descriptions of the pinball machine itself! Just wish that we could have seen Porter and Tyler's hookup in greater detail and gotten a clearer sense of Porter's mental transformation into a mega-hung himbo.
1/21/21, 11:06 AM
Great premise! I'm quite excited to see what you have in mind! .... and given your Author name, I imagined the whole thing taking place at JR's on 17th Street NW. Goodness knows I've been sloppy there at Showtunes after a bad date.
1/21/21, 11:01 AM
really good zombie horror. 10/10
1/21/21, 10:23 AM
love it! you're ideas are great and excellent writing! not only a hot concept, but the story itself is well written
1/21/21, 10:10 AM
such a tease!!! can't wait to see what happens
1/21/21, 9:38 AM
I love this kind of story. I just wish it had gone a little more slowly. Also, from the story itself, I would have never known that it was a contagious disease turning the men into sex-crazed zombies. Maybe include some more scenes where we see how the disease is transmitted?
giveintothemusk
1/21/21, 9:07 AM
Oh man. Can't wait!
Anonymous
1/21/21, 8:03 AM
I love this!!! Hope you do a puppy/animal play episode!!
1/21/21, 7:38 AM
Great premise, and I love the pictures. However, I wonder if it's trying to compress too much time into a single 5000-word chapter. We get these massive time jumps, and after each one, the narrator speaks in general terms about what's been happening to him. So the story feels less immediate than it might otherwise. Also, although the narrator tells us repeatedly that he's a devout Christian, we don't see that playing out very much in his interaction with the natives or in his struggles with his mental transformation. Just a matter of personal taste, but for me the story would have worked better if we saw the narrator being very judgmental and preachy before his abduction.