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1/19/21, 12:31 PM
Loved that you put filipino references to this like maria makiling and putting your clothes backwards when your lost. Also weirdly wholesome ending, i loved it.
1/19/21, 12:20 PM
Thank you guys. It took me more then a year to write it. Part II coming eventually.
1/19/21, 10:40 AM
Yeah, it's really tricky writing in a regional accent that's not your own. I laid it on pretty thick at the start, because I wanted to give Liam a distinctive voice that showed his social position, as a young man who felt like he didn't fit in to his small town, but still spoke like he came from that small town (unlike Master Jack, who speaks with more of a posh BBC accent). In the later parts of the story, Liam's accent is less pronounced, partly because I didn't want it to get in the way of describing the action. Still, I went back and changed all his "my"s to "me"s in order to keep consistent. And I have no idea who any of the models are; I just downloaded a lot of photos from the LPSG forums and strung a few of them together into a story.
1/19/21, 10:30 AM
This is a clever story, loving the build up!
1/19/21, 10:19 AM
Some great ideas here. It could still use a bit more editing, as lines like "a massive duck hanging from his waist" and "the man's duck had fallen out" made me laugh out loud. And I had trouble buying into the premise that everyone in the town except Pat would see black water coming from the faucet and decide to drink it. But the story had some great Lovecraftian horror moments that really worked for me.
1/19/21, 10:04 AM
I had to get used to the English used here, and occasionally I thought that Liam already was dumbed down, which says a lot about me I guess... I loved the bit with Georgi and Pawel! Once I overcame the language thing it made for another Hypnothrill classic! By the way, asking for a friend, who's the guy modeling for Liam?
1/19/21, 9:39 AM
I really enjoyed this. Pushed every single button that I have. Please make more!
1/19/21, 9:18 AM
i would love to see the expansion of control. maybe over military or the rest of the town/country/world ;))
how to read the first story it won't show
1/19/21, 8:03 AM
how to read the first story it won't show
1/19/21, 6:31 AM
Interesting premise! I'd love to see more clone-sex or at least an description of what it feels like to be addicted to whatever that was! Great work!