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1/18/21, 2:59 PM
Great plot line with the two muscle jocks gradually transform into competing, sexed-up, cum-dump, boi sluts.
Satyr Hedonist
1/18/21, 2:20 PM
Ethan Slides into Third!
1/18/21, 1:38 PM
I'm happy you're okay, man! And I hope you had a good Holiday season. But please I beg of you come back with this great story!
1/18/21, 1:31 PM
@FeedYourHead, that scene with Georgi and Pawel was probably my favorite part to write, because there's a mix of comedy and horror in the way that Liam unwittingly triggers their conditioning. And I love getting to play with dramatic irony that way, where the reader becomes aware of something before the first-person narrator does.
1/18/21, 1:21 PM
Hypnothrill has done it again! I like when you provide pictures with the story--my favorites are Liam himself and that ripped duo in the tires. ;p I also enjoyed the explanation as to why non-English speakers were partially immune, and how that immunity could be broken. Fantastic!
Q
1/18/21, 1:02 PM
Whenever people try to make a Jumanji game story, they usually come up short, but I think you’ve done quite well with it! I think the pup will quite like this outcome.
Anonymous
1/18/21, 12:55 PM
So where's the story? This is either a setup to what the main character will go through, or it's an anchor point for a series of flashbacks so the audience can understand this world better. The audience can then use that information to assume what the character will soon go through as the story ends. Great writing, shame to see it go nowhere.
1/18/21, 12:33 PM
Very hot story, Hypnothrill! Would love to read more if you want to continue it.
Anonymous
1/18/21, 11:37 AM
She promised them 1500$ for doing experiments on them. Did they get the money? If she can't keep her promise then she is just a coward backing out of her words, doesn't deserve the title "mistress".
Anon
1/18/21, 11:34 AM
hot without the pictures even hotter