Recent Comments

Cracker
1/17/21, 3:53 PM
Really great story. Good plot and the seduction part was off the charts
1/17/21, 3:52 PM
loved it, short and sweet!
BPtime
1/17/21, 3:50 PM
Hot and funny. Loved it!
Anonymous
1/17/21, 3:26 PM
This is an amazing story. I can't wait to see more!
1/17/21, 3:23 PM
Good beginning. Needs a part two
1/17/21, 2:52 PM
I found this story of elven seduction to be especially hot. Your excellent writing pushed a lot of buttons for me. Another great story, Ethan!
1/17/21, 2:01 PM
I really wanted to see the 2 named nobles 69ing each other, but it was a fun ride anyways
1/17/21, 1:33 PM
This was a good story! :D I love a classic hypnotic induction, and there was some humor, too. I am sure that as you become more confident as an erotica writer, your stories will expand. It's never easy to put your work out there, so major congratulations! :)
Somnus
1/17/21, 12:17 PM
I love how well written this is. Most of the submissions on this site are pretty good but occasionally we are treated to pieces like this that go way beyond. Pieces that are genuine stories. I wanted to learn about the world you've created almost as much as I wanted an elven magic induced orgy to break out! Great stuff :)
Oddballs
1/17/21, 9:48 AM
I'd hate to be critical, but this is your first time. The structure of this story is very basic and the overall plot progress was a little too straightforward. It felt like things fell a bit short and lacking in substance as far as description and details go. On the other hand, I do like that Oliver, the reluctant one, was the one who got to 'top' Cal. And personally, I find direct suck and fuck repetitive and cliche anyway. So I preferred your approach for the climax via dry humping rather than if they were to get naked. As much as I appreciate tasteful nudity as a medium, I must say that entire nakedness in erotica - story, video, picture, etc - is overdone to say the least. So props to you for choosing that route. Smut does not require devoid of clothing. So basic take away - add details, add depth, add description, stay unique. Most importantly, keep writing; we've all been new at this.