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Maxigay
1/7/21, 4:41 PM
The theme is interesting and morbid, everything that is transformation and rubber is my thing. But I find the conversion very fast, it should go more slowly, the character living his own transformation and the consequences of it. There are writing problems in some paragraphs. I hope that all criticism serves for your growth. A hug
1/7/21, 3:17 PM
I read this entire stories in around 4-5 days, despite the fact that humiliation is really not my thing. It's just so well written. Albeit, there was a time were the story was starting to circle, the Zane storyline really helped it take new directions. But it's becoming more and more improbable that everyone is a gay sadist. If Zane would have done non-sexual humiliations, I think it would have been less of a stretch. I'm also baffled by how durable that hypnosis is. But overall, nice story.
1/7/21, 3:07 PM
can you continue please?
1/7/21, 2:30 PM
You should include an incubus character as a parody of the Shinigami from Death Note. Also maybe the Dick Note has the power to script behaviors, as the Death Note can compel the people that are about to die to go into all kinds of situations. Then again maybe it just has the ability to perform the described dick transformation.
Richard Redman
1/7/21, 1:43 PM
How may I serve you today, sir?
Richard Redman
1/7/21, 1:34 PM
I want to work for Unity Crop.
1/7/21, 10:19 AM
I liked that the story featured a pretty unique scenario; there aren't a lot of erotic stories about agricultural workers on here, and I thought it was interesting how they were becoming fused with their uniforms and machines. I'll admit I had to rely pretty heavily on the photos you provided in order to visualize what was going on. I also wish there was a clearer setting from the beginning; for the first half of the story, I thought it was set in the rural US, rather than the Netherlands. Finally, I think that 1st person narration would have worked better than 2nd person narration for this story--and maybe you agree, because you sometimes unintentionally switch from "you" to "I" mid-paragraph.
giveintothemusk
1/7/21, 9:26 AM
Great start!
1/7/21, 8:56 AM
I liked it, despite some grammar problems and some very fast pacing towards the end. If you write another chapter, I'd suggest switching to a different narrator, maybe one of the other soldiers on the base who's seeing his friends transform. Otherwise, it's going to start to seem a little too repetitive.
1/7/21, 8:22 AM
This is SO GREAT! I hope you planned more chapters, with Noah or else :D