Recent Comments

1/7/21, 8:56 AM
I liked it, despite some grammar problems and some very fast pacing towards the end. If you write another chapter, I'd suggest switching to a different narrator, maybe one of the other soldiers on the base who's seeing his friends transform. Otherwise, it's going to start to seem a little too repetitive.
1/7/21, 8:22 AM
This is SO GREAT! I hope you planned more chapters, with Noah or else :D
Dec 29, 2020
Daniel
1/7/21, 5:30 AM
More struggle during transformation, more details about the two men, more info after they arrived. I.J.S.
Daniel
1/7/21, 5:17 AM
I agree with Hypnothrill. I.J.S.
Jan 6, 2021
Daniel
1/7/21, 4:48 AM
Ok, needed more. I.J.S.
Daniel
1/7/21, 4:39 AM
?? I.J.S.
1/7/21, 4:29 AM
Love the story, when will there be more??
Jan 3, 2021
Daniel
1/7/21, 4:18 AM
Seriously hot manipulation sequence, nice and steady build, more please I.J.S.
Daniel
1/7/21, 3:50 AM
Reminded me of an episode of Dr.Who. I.J.S.