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Gasuda
1/3/21, 3:02 AM
This is a truly bizarre story, but props to you - until it takes that turn, it's one of the hottest stories I've read on here. After it takes that turn, it becomes just *fascinating.*
1/3/21, 2:59 AM
You shouldn't have to explain anything, friend. Write YOUR story. A lot of really good stories here get inundated with requests and complaints, but you have to write YOUR story regardless of whatever anyone else says. I'm loving what you're doing. This is a world you are creating beautifully with world building descriptions that truly flesh it out more realistically. That's why there is an element of discomfort...I mean, y'all, imagine a world in which straight men suddenly are disgusted by, loose all interest in, and stop caring completely about women. What you're doing is not far fetched. If you truly enjoy full on mind control and shifting of core beliefs, desires, and personhood, this is insanely erotic. And, on top of it all, it would naturally be a cruel world for women...and, well, it's worth considering we currently live in one in which straight men that actually do want women treat them like shit constantly anyway. Don't read the negative comments. Just keep writing your amazing story.
1/3/21, 2:30 AM
Hi, the Original story is from me, postet as a "wiki" story 2017 ago - So everyone could write on the universe with me. the second part is already written, but only connected with the first part on the appearence of the Guard #0029 at the end. I would love if you post your addition to the storyline (like hypnothrill also did years ago) (the site hadn't the series feature back then)
1/3/21, 1:07 AM
Good story. I think the actual act of "programming" Kyle could be a bit tighter, with a more cause and effect relationship between what Shawn suggests and how Kyle changes; there are some instances where it seems like things progress faster than it logically should. Also, there are a couple instances where you reverse their names, and it does make it confusing to read.
1/3/21, 1:01 AM
So I should take it that you are the original author of *All Hail the Emperor* and you're reposting the story for any and everyone to add to the story. I've enjoyed this story and its sequel many a day. I actually have my own take on part 2, so should I post that here?
1/3/21, 12:30 AM
okay, good to know that the women situation will hopefully improve, but I think you can tone down how bad they are being treated for now, it makes the reading more easy going
AMS
1/3/21, 12:15 AM
Hi. I thought I'd pop back on and respond to everyone's comments, although I hope I’m not writing too much or spoiling anything. First, I really appreciate the constructive criticism about the role of women in this story. I think it's a very valid criticism and one that I've thought a lot about while writing these past couple chapters. The character of Gemma and her relationship to Aaron was actually the first impetus I had for writing this story. In large part, this whole story is me rehashing my childhood growing up gay in a high demand religious community. I think that upbringing is why I have a mind control fetish and why this story is about religion. So, on the one hand I was curious how women might be treated under this fantastic reality, which is very bad. Secondly, I wanted to explore how someone with as much power as Aaron can do things with unintended consequences even if they have no malice, which is something I’ll explore more in the future. The role of women in the story is not titillating and I didn’t mean it to be titillating. But I don’t know if I’ve done a good job of integrating those non-erotic portions of the story, into the gay erotica people are trying to jack off to. Anyway, I didn’t mean to write an essay. But I appreciate everyone’s comments and I’m glad people are enjoying my writing. I can say that in my planned outline, how women are treated now will not be how women are treated for the rest of the story. But I don’t think I’m going to change my story even if it makes it less hot as erotica. Thanks to all!
May 7, 2020
Anonymous
1/2/21, 11:36 PM
Wow! *Hotter than hot!* And yes, "utterly twisted", "queasily sinister". i also thank you for sharing your depraved mind! i read this coming directly from your story, "Gift Card", and will admit being disappointed in it for the reasons i mentioned in comments there. This story was everything i was hoping for in the last one! Your lead-in with the van ride was a mild indication of what was to come. The moment Travis's rescuer met Travis face-to-face, the suspicion and erotic tension started growing rapidly, but took us nervously step by step through the warehouse with its growing filth, erotic sex, and engulfing heat and stench to astonishment and gnawing fear as i realize that what is happening to our rescuer is beyond anything I might have possibly imagined. As I feel the invasion of each body part, my denial and panic grows to a crescendo. Then panic fades as arousal and infatuation continue to increase along with growing calm excitement and surrender to the supernatural charms of Master Sage -- until his imposed enthralling erotic bliss explodes into unconsciousness! Wow! Great story! I feel like I just got ridden hard and left tethered and wet.
Anonymous
1/2/21, 11:31 PM
is this happening? a story where it finally explores the consequences of a reality wide gay conversion without making the woman gay or ignored entirely? what happens yo women when they arent desired anymore? considering even when thwy are s desired they are treated poorly , i hope everything turns out alright for them in this slice of reality. this has been a curiosity of mine and i hope this story deliver
1/2/21, 11:31 PM
I'm so excited for chapter 4! Keep up the great work!