Recent Comments

1/3/21, 12:30 AM
okay, good to know that the women situation will hopefully improve, but I think you can tone down how bad they are being treated for now, it makes the reading more easy going
AMS
1/3/21, 12:15 AM
Hi. I thought I'd pop back on and respond to everyone's comments, although I hope I’m not writing too much or spoiling anything. First, I really appreciate the constructive criticism about the role of women in this story. I think it's a very valid criticism and one that I've thought a lot about while writing these past couple chapters. The character of Gemma and her relationship to Aaron was actually the first impetus I had for writing this story. In large part, this whole story is me rehashing my childhood growing up gay in a high demand religious community. I think that upbringing is why I have a mind control fetish and why this story is about religion. So, on the one hand I was curious how women might be treated under this fantastic reality, which is very bad. Secondly, I wanted to explore how someone with as much power as Aaron can do things with unintended consequences even if they have no malice, which is something I’ll explore more in the future. The role of women in the story is not titillating and I didn’t mean it to be titillating. But I don’t know if I’ve done a good job of integrating those non-erotic portions of the story, into the gay erotica people are trying to jack off to. Anyway, I didn’t mean to write an essay. But I appreciate everyone’s comments and I’m glad people are enjoying my writing. I can say that in my planned outline, how women are treated now will not be how women are treated for the rest of the story. But I don’t think I’m going to change my story even if it makes it less hot as erotica. Thanks to all!
May 7, 2020
Anonymous
1/2/21, 11:36 PM
Wow! *Hotter than hot!* And yes, "utterly twisted", "queasily sinister". i also thank you for sharing your depraved mind! i read this coming directly from your story, "Gift Card", and will admit being disappointed in it for the reasons i mentioned in comments there. This story was everything i was hoping for in the last one! Your lead-in with the van ride was a mild indication of what was to come. The moment Travis's rescuer met Travis face-to-face, the suspicion and erotic tension started growing rapidly, but took us nervously step by step through the warehouse with its growing filth, erotic sex, and engulfing heat and stench to astonishment and gnawing fear as i realize that what is happening to our rescuer is beyond anything I might have possibly imagined. As I feel the invasion of each body part, my denial and panic grows to a crescendo. Then panic fades as arousal and infatuation continue to increase along with growing calm excitement and surrender to the supernatural charms of Master Sage -- until his imposed enthralling erotic bliss explodes into unconsciousness! Wow! Great story! I feel like I just got ridden hard and left tethered and wet.
Anonymous
1/2/21, 11:31 PM
is this happening? a story where it finally explores the consequences of a reality wide gay conversion without making the woman gay or ignored entirely? what happens yo women when they arent desired anymore? considering even when thwy are s desired they are treated poorly , i hope everything turns out alright for them in this slice of reality. this has been a curiosity of mine and i hope this story deliver
1/2/21, 11:31 PM
I'm so excited for chapter 4! Keep up the great work!
Anonymous
1/2/21, 11:27 PM
I wonder how long before he fully breaks?
Dec 31, 2020
1/2/21, 11:13 PM
What a joyous and lovely story! I hope we get to see what happens to them next!
Anonymous
1/2/21, 11:09 PM
This was great!!! Please do some hair growth.
1/2/21, 10:54 PM
I'm LOVING this story...seriously one of my faves already. I have faith that you're taking it where you want to go. Don't worry about what anyone says beyond how you want to tell your story. If you already have plans for what happens for the women in this new world, go with it. You're writing this story to fulfill your vision, no one elses. People have told me I've gone too far in many of my stories, but I write for me first and that makes for better storytelling. Merely because others wouldn't go as far as you with certain aspects, does NOT mean it's not a good place to take a story. Challenge them! Don't go off course of your vision merely due to a few differing opinions <3
1/2/21, 10:50 PM
I wonder if twins and Coach Hamilton got caught somewhere in the maze. I would love to hear about that!