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1/2/21, 2:22 PM
Ethan is just the *perfect* vehicle for this weird combo of hot, hilarious, and adorable... I love this chapter and the ridiculous way it escalates. The sex is hot — fuck, even the way you describe *just Ethan* is hot — but I'm also just so impressed and charmed by the way you shaped this chapter! The only thing I didn't care for *at first* was the kind of on the nose description of "this is Ethan's power, this is what's happening" (which I understand came from people not really getting it last chapter), but then even that was made wonderful when you *repeated* it... I love a motif ;P and it added this layer of character and tongue in cheek personality to the narrator-voice that I found super fun. This chapter *at least* rivals the last one in terms of raw hotness, and I love where you're taking the story so far! Ethan is gonna stick in my head as a character for a long time...
1/2/21, 2:05 PM
I like the fact the dad was behind it. Please continue this and make it longer
Dec 31, 2020
1/2/21, 1:59 PM
the more of your stories I read the more of your craft *and* your personality shines through, and -- oh, wait, I should comment on the hot parts first hm. WELL. this was very hot... I loved the kind of lovingly detailed descriptions of the various reds and blacks, and the unexpected twists throughout the night -- it made things as simple as a drink order feel engaging and sexually tense~! anyway, your *craft...* dude this was so damn well done. you handled this with such a deft hand, and made each of the four sets of identically named characters feel so distinct. and Peter!! Peter was done *masterfully* imo, an engaging narrator despite not being involved in the specific antics of the story beyond as a waiter. really, really well done
1/2/21, 1:04 PM
This was nice, thanks for writing it.
1/2/21, 12:00 PM
again, I don't like how the women are being treated in the story, but I have a suggestion: why don't we see how the police station is now, after they were turned
1/2/21, 11:34 AM
Bravo! Many thanks for this episode in Markie's adventures.
1/2/21, 11:15 AM
> once I finished, I kept the story going in my head with what I thought might happen next > That was my hope in plotting it this way. I think Ben's transformation in the reader's mind will be powerful and way better than my prose!
1/2/21, 11:13 AM
Thank you all for the comments! The fun I had writing this mystery-within-a-mystery really surprised me! (And it gave me the opportunity to read Poe again, so many prizes!) I have an idea for pt 4 that can serve as a finale for the entire series! Fret not.
Anonymous
1/2/21, 9:28 AM
fun sexy story that was a hot to read! this story is gonna be orgasm fuel for a good long while!
1/2/21, 7:59 AM
curious who the gentlemen is who happens to come by in the end