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11/28/20, 5:36 PM
Thanks! Actually, I'm probably going to do a sequel to Bullies at some point, but don't know when I'll find the time.
Sexcrab
11/28/20, 4:48 PM
Fantastic story. Very sexy and no exaggerations. The master being a power bottom was a grateful surprise (It's rare to read stories with them).
11/28/20, 4:16 PM
Fantastic idea, extremely well written and yes it's hot. I have to say I just hate the fact that Eric became little but I love this story and how you've taken us on this journey and made us think! weirdly enough, I had been hoping that Eric and Ken were going to become the parents lol
Anonymous
11/28/20, 3:50 PM
You're awesome dude. Would be great to read more of this, with different types of frat dudes getting different punishments based on their weaknesses or crimes. Your other story, 'Bullies' is, I think, my favourite story on here - bar none
11/28/20, 3:21 PM
Lord, this is horrifyingly chilling and hot as hell. Well fucking done.
Anonymous
11/28/20, 3:05 PM
Nice work, man. The time gap is too big for my silly brain to fill, though. Would love to know what actually happened to the guys.
11/28/20, 2:50 PM
I would have loved more detail and torture; maybe made into a two or three part story, but it was still a good story. nice work!
11/28/20, 2:44 PM
To the two reviewers above: I agree this story was a bit rushed. I had the idea two months ago, but between work and the holidays, I just didn't have the time I needed to flesh everything out. Maybe after the new year, I'll do "Grand Theft Penis: Reloaded" and expand the story. I had wanted to include full depictions of Kevin's LSAT experience, Moose and Jason's increasingly humiliating efforts to avoid getting caught in the locker room shower with hard-ons, a scene involving the SIRs forced to shave each other (with a special depilatory cream that lasts for years!), and more tickling scenes (which is one of my bigger kinks). Also, there was going to be a subplot where the brothers had to pay increasingly large sums of cash to various charities to avoid Wynne's tortures to the point that they got cut off from their family's and ultimately bankrupted the frat. Another reason I considered not posting this as part of the Halloween contest. But I was afraid if I put it off, I would procrastinate and not post it for months. I'm bad about that.
11/28/20, 1:08 PM
> I really like the author asides when they appear–you manage to strike a perfect balance between winking/nudging (which gets really old after a while) and speaking frankly to the reader without totally removing them from the world of the story. > I love Tom Robbins -- and I will take any chance I can to plug him! If you have not read him, immediately stop reading this and order one of his books on Amazon (or whatever service you use). May I recommend "SKINNY LEGS AND ALL" -- my first exposure to him -- his famous "EVEN COWGIRLS GET THE BLUES" or his beautiful "JITTERBUG PERFUME" where we learn the secret of immortality is sex and beets. Funny, insightful, his love of language and playful narratives will make you love words to the point where reading and dancing are the same thing. My narrative asides are all me channeling Tom Robbins. > West Virginia crew fleeing the scene and heading to parts unknown. Do I sense a European adventure coming? > Think a little more tropically. In the FORUM, we've been discussing symbionts and cold weather/ winter/ darkness and whether those would be weaknesses for them. I say, let's go south! > I love how the story serves a small reminder of what I think is one of your major themes–the notion that power almost always corrupts. (THEY)... keep desiring more, more, MORE despite having amazing bodies and perfect health. Nothing is ever enough, especially the feeling of being worshipped. In the old stories, gods needed praise and worship like a drug–it kept them alive and powerful. > This is so well stated, I just wanted to draw attention to it again and thank you for the observation.
11/28/20, 12:55 PM
> Your sense of the dramaturgical is exquisite, your feel of tempo and rythm impeccable, your stories are orgasm-inducingly tense and exciting. > Wow -- thank you! That sentence felt very much like one of mine -- balanced phrases, percussive consonants, strong adjectives -- well done! A few years ago, I was hired as the dramaturg on the "new" National Tour of CAMELOT -- basically, my job was to take a three-hour juggernaut and bring it in at 90 minutes, yet still maintain the "integrity" of the original piece. A pageantry musical, CAMELOT is a lot of standing around with sweeping monologues and boring songs. In some ways, it was easy to bring it down because it lacks so much content. Anyway, I worked on it for a couple months, going through at least four drafts for the producers -- only to find out Lerner's (the librettist and lyricist) granddaughter had already created a 90-min version that had been approved by the estate. I immediately got a copy and found that we were fairly close (I got rid of a few more songs than her). I got paid really well to research a show I don't like and create a script that was never used. Dramaturg.