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11/28/20, 6:18 AM
Dude, I can't wait for the next chapter, I'm so anxious! I check it out everyday to see if there's an update haha
11/28/20, 5:47 AM
Love this could we maybe have some more slutty bros walking around maybe someone who can make more muscle bros
11/28/20, 5:32 AM
What a thrilling conclusion! I really like the author asides when they appear--you manage to strike a perfect balance between winking/nudging (which gets really old after a while) and speaking frankly to the reader without totally removing them from the world of the story. I honestly did not expect the twist of the West Virginia crew fleeing the scene and heading to parts unknown. Do I sense a European adventure coming? :p And poor, poor Tully...as I said in an earlier comment, I do genuinely like her character. I wonder what will become of her? Murdock is gone--there doesn't seem to be a way to extrapolate the Symbiont from him. WIll she have to kill him? Will he kill her? Finally, I love how the story serves a small reminder of what I think is one of your major themes--the notion that power almost *always* corrupts. The Sheriff, the Great One, Murdock...they're all corrupted by the Symbionts and keep desiring more, more, MORE despite having amazing bodies and perfect health. Nothing is ever enough, especially the feeling of being worshipped. In the old stories, gods needed praise and worship like a drug--it kept them alive and powerful. This story reminds me of that. It's brilliant. :)
11/28/20, 4:34 AM
Mmmm. After the discussion in the last comment section, I was in agreement with the others--Eric was clearly being manipulated (the use of the actual Milgram experiment is a clever idea). And again, I want to emphasize a few things: A. this is an excellently-written story; B. you are free to create what you want, and C. you have made it abundantly clear that Chris and Ken are horrible people for doing what they've done. Those are all key points. But man alive, this is *horrifying.* The line where the now-reduced Eric remarks "There's a vague sense I should know what this lump is" proves that the people in the experiment have completely lost their understanding of sex besides "Poke this, feels good." And that, for me, is the most upsetting thing (which is brilliantly paralleled with the unethical trickery used to enlist Eric--and other people--in the experiment; the phrase "consent" is even used for both scenarios)--that these men are now, in essence, children who are being sexually trafficked. I understand that they have grown bodies and brains, but their mental capacity is too reduced to truly say they're adults. For me, the mind is the key to consent, and now that these men have literally lost theirs, they can no longer do so. But again, you've made it extremely clear that this is a bad situation, and that Ken is a horrible human being for designing a whole experiment to get himself off. In that, you have written a fantastic story with a horrifying premise. A work, to me, of pure horror--but to others, sexual pleasure. I know that sometimes I go a little overboard with these comments/analyses, but to be honest, I don't like to reduce all of the stories on this site to masturbation fodder. Don't get me wrong, it's fine to write a story with the express purpose of getting people hot and bothered! I've enjoyed many a tale like that on here. :) But I also love the stories like this--the ones that make you think and spark discussions. Absman's "Pollination" series is a sci-fi epic; Bigger's current "One of Us" is a classic mystery; dear Swizzington's "Slave Academy" stories were pulse-pounding thrillers. And this piece, like Wesley Bracken's story about the town which steals life energy from gay people, are philosophical explorations. That some people are able to masturbate to them doesn't detract from that! :D I don't like to say "This site is JUST for porn." Art, discussion, and analysis can come from anywhere--this story is the proof. So I bow to you, Mr. Mindwiper. Well done. :)
Bear
11/28/20, 4:30 AM
great read cant wait to read more of your stories.
11/28/20, 2:53 AM
absman, I adore your writing, I really do. Your sense of the dramaturgical is exquisite, your feel of tempo and rythm impeccable, your stories are orgasm-inducingly tense and exciting. Thank you for writing stuff, dude. And thank you for that short pruning at the start of this chapter.
Midnight
11/28/20, 1:41 AM
Interesting take on genie powers. I like the idea of the genie traveling from person to person through the game. For authenticity's sake, be aware that y'all is just short for you all. Nobody says y'all if they're talking to just one person. Other than that, I can totally see all these guys in FFA at my old high school.
11/28/20, 1:39 AM
Yeah there may be more chapters. I have to seize upon some kind of inspiration that triggers a story line. Some stories are better left open to your imagination though. If I get more interest I would come back to this one.
11/28/20, 1:00 AM
Another incredible chapter! I thought that this might be Eric's fate. Thanks for letting Eric express our mixture of revulsion and arousal before his trigger song and for letting Eric share his thoughts and feelings as he becomes little. This chapter was particularly well crafted. Excellent work! I look forward to the conclusion.
Anonymous
11/28/20, 12:53 AM
i didnt know where this was going at first. it almost seemed to be going in a completely different direction. but then bam. the reveal. erics demise which just may be one of the hottest things written on the site. honestly the way you write about the removal of power and shifting power dynamics and the pure humiliation of those involved... wow. you are up there with the greats of the site instantly this stands up against againstmywill robinhood swizzington ollie among others im forgetting at the moment. great job! regardless of the taboo subject matter which will no doubt get push back this has been excellently crafted.