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Midnight
11/28/20, 1:41 AM
Interesting take on genie powers. I like the idea of the genie traveling from person to person through the game. For authenticity's sake, be aware that y'all is just short for you all. Nobody says y'all if they're talking to just one person. Other than that, I can totally see all these guys in FFA at my old high school.
11/28/20, 1:39 AM
Yeah there may be more chapters. I have to seize upon some kind of inspiration that triggers a story line. Some stories are better left open to your imagination though. If I get more interest I would come back to this one.
11/28/20, 1:00 AM
Another incredible chapter! I thought that this might be Eric's fate. Thanks for letting Eric express our mixture of revulsion and arousal before his trigger song and for letting Eric share his thoughts and feelings as he becomes little. This chapter was particularly well crafted. Excellent work! I look forward to the conclusion.
Anonymous
11/28/20, 12:53 AM
i didnt know where this was going at first. it almost seemed to be going in a completely different direction. but then bam. the reveal. erics demise which just may be one of the hottest things written on the site. honestly the way you write about the removal of power and shifting power dynamics and the pure humiliation of those involved... wow. you are up there with the greats of the site instantly this stands up against againstmywill robinhood swizzington ollie among others im forgetting at the moment. great job! regardless of the taboo subject matter which will no doubt get push back this has been excellently crafted.
11/28/20, 12:40 AM
> Je t’adore, mon Rugby Boy. Adieu. > Fear not, Gil's story is far from over! Trust me, I have a great idea for him in Book Three -- I planted the seed in the very speech you quoted...
11/28/20, 12:05 AM
I want to cry. I loved everything. Rugby boy saying "“I would’ve followed you anyway, because we were friends, because we’d both loved and submitted to powerful men. We’d had that in common, so we could support each other now. But you’ve barely gotten your power and already you abuse it. Mon ami, you disappoint me.” I now know why I love him so. He understands brotherhood and the hierarchy of men. Je t'adore, mon Rugby Boy. Adieu.
11/27/20, 11:45 PM
I see, good luck and looking forewords to it
11/27/20, 11:30 PM
I MOTHER FUCKING CALLED IT! Eric got GOT! I'm just a little proud of that. A chilling and wonderful addition to the story, thank you for the continued and consistent updates. your story is causing a lot of really deep debate, but i think that's a testament to the quality of the work. it feels so well written that it feels real enough that some people are uncomfortable. GO YOU. of course, if this were A) remotely plausible in real life, and B) something that actually happened, this would be horrifying. As fiction, I am LAPPING this stuff up, i have no issues with completely fictional literary characters having horrific shit happen to them. BRAVO! Hats should be doffed to you my friend!
Lusty Stallion
11/27/20, 10:20 PM
@darkblade2814 we're getting there. It's part of the plan. Yoir suggestions have heavily influemced the stoey so I thought I'd leave that for the next installment @Jr - yes let's @Ciriii57 - I could do it with a memtor figure. I'm not personally into a real Father and Son story though. But a surrogate Father, or perhaps a step Dad? Thanks for the suggestion
Elm
11/27/20, 6:45 PM
hopefully you can continue this story someday! its one of my favorites.