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dannylyndin
11/23/20, 5:21 AM
hope the genie returns for some more life
Anonymous
11/23/20, 5:00 AM
Please make another
Anonymous
11/23/20, 4:28 AM
Nice! Loved it!!
11/23/20, 2:43 AM
Again, Maestro beats me to the punch. The preppy dialogue reminds me of the movie *Distrubing Behavior* and if you were going for the same effect (*ie* showing the changes to the two to the characters in the story and the reader) it would work. But it just seems out of place and character like Hypnothrill points out.
Anonymous
11/23/20, 2:21 AM
the 3 step process from dorky computer scientist, to horny computer slut, dipping agriculture teacher and finally to redneck jock plays great. a heavy tinge of the previous life is present in each step but by the time the transformation is complete we're left with a completely different dipping sex driven Man. if it motivates you to write more ill tell you about every time i shoot to your stories and every time i venture into smoking from your "encouragement". thanks man and eagerly awaiting your next piece -Z
11/23/20, 2:13 AM
LOVE the "retroactive wishes" device. Could launch a whole series.
11/23/20, 1:49 AM
Wow, le ofrce el culo y todo jajaj Me parece raro ese Ducka apareciendo asi de la nada y el prota aceptando asi como asi, quizas podria haberlo resuelto mejor :P Como sea, nada mal. Un par de faltas ortográficas pero nada que no se pueda perdonar.
easdf
11/23/20, 12:02 AM
While gang banging and feminization are mostly welcomed, the rape themes in this piece were too much in my opinion. Claiming he had a face that deserves that is a common justification to many sexual harassment cases, accepting this in court felt too much of blaiming the victim and crossing the line.
11/22/20, 11:48 PM
A quick zap to reprogram wasn't very interesting. Before that part, it seemed like the subject was mentally changed, but still had enough awareness to realize he had been altered. It would probably have been more interesting to leave him with that level of comprehension. Perhaps if he had begged the cop to not complete the change and had it delayed under threat, it might have been more fun. I actually thought he might get taken home by the cop to be used.
11/22/20, 11:27 PM
Excellent beginning! I look forward to Jacob gaining more control over Fred.