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Nov 14, 2020
Evan
11/17/20, 12:35 AM
Tremendous! Very well done. Definitely made me feel good. Hypnothrill's advice is excellent too. I loved this story and a little extra depth of what he's losing would take it even higher. Can't wait to see your other story. Thanks for writing.
Nov 14, 2020
11/17/20, 12:10 AM
By god is this well written. I love how semi erratic the guy's line of thinking was and how he gradually changed. While instant changes are fun and all, the gradual transformation was the real kicker.
11/17/20, 12:04 AM
> And another superhero reference. > Hahaha -- have we met?
11/16/20, 11:30 PM
My palms were seriously sweaty for Devin when he was being carried up the stairs spiderman style. And another superhero reference.
11/16/20, 11:07 PM
I'm liking that the elder Lenoldi is just starting to understand that he's not the one in control here. Arrogance is one hell of a drug. Reminds me of the porn studio owner in "Erotically Enhanced Executives" from my Vanilla series - the guy who thinks he's in control right up until the moment he realizes he'll never be in control again. Laughed out loud at Tully trying to remember how to record her call. I've done that one myself. Yeah... I'm definitely in love with Rugby Boy. Please don't hurt him. You can hurt Sheriff Lane.
11/16/20, 10:36 PM
> I feel bad for the Sheriff and Snake. Knowing that they can’t become Great Ones, given that they’re already carrying a lesser symbiote - it might be enough to drive a man mad. > More for the Sheriff than Snake, for sure! But I think the Sheriff likes being Svengali -- not the King, but the guy with the King's ear. He can cause a lot of damage as Prime Minister and if people kill the King, well... he can always make another. > I think I’m in love with Rugby Boy. The scene in the diner got me. > Someone's got to be the ingenue in a horror movie.
11/16/20, 10:27 PM
I don't think Snake particularly cares about wanting to be a Great One. Lane probably got really salty about it, which is probably part of the reason why he hatched the plan to turn the Deputy into one: if he can't be the Great One himself, he can at least make sure the Great One is under his control.
11/16/20, 10:21 PM
I kinda love how even controlled by alien symbiotes, the class disparity between our characters is still evident. The idea that the Lenoldi's aren't just being ridden by the symbiotes, but that their natural competitive impulses are coming through is hilarious to me. I feel bad for the Sheriff and Snake. Knowing that they can't become Great Ones, given that they're already carrying a lesser symbiote - it might be enough to drive a man mad. Pretty sure the French conjugations are just a translation issue at this point. Rugby Boy is switching freely between the formal and the informal when talking to Snake. I think I'm in love with Rugby Boy. The scene in the diner got me.
11/16/20, 10:20 PM
to be continued!
11/16/20, 10:14 PM
Love this!