Really well written, looking forward to future chapters!

The story is simply amazing. I really liked the pace of the story and the characters themselves) I think Colt will play a very important role in saving his friend and other heroes of this story, but before that, many heroes will fall and be corrupted) But I think Colt's friendship and love with his friend will defeat the Villain. After all, in the end, the Heroes defeat the Villains) The only thing that is missing in the story so far is more sex scenes with the Master (with Iron Claw and Golden Eagle) and possibly with other heroes) but this is the first chapter, maybe in the future it will be. I also feel sorry for Colt, he lost his parents, and now his best friend (but I hope it won't be for long and at the end of the story he will return it somehow)

I am excited to read more!

I'm waiting for the chapter 15 of the original series to be written so we can see Jimmy fuck him and Hank too.

This is wonderful. These boys are so cute. THANK YOU

Hello, good evening. I need to know, who challenged them in the hotel court? What will Eric do with the video he saved in his email? Will Larry take revenge on the athletes who live with him? One day, will both of them want to be dominated by the master and go after him? Will there be a hierarchical domination of the master with the two with Eric? Please, complete the story.:pleading_face:

Wow - very different from the initial version and ultimately more successful, not because of a fight but because of psychological/emotional issues. Nevertheless, I actually liked the scenes of Colt pouring over books on hypnosis - that's exactly what Colt would do. I also liked the scene of Colt sneaking up to and spying into the warehouse - it was really exciting like a good mystery movie. But like a good movie or play, you don't describe the details of what Colt did to cleanse Rocky of Leviathan. But since you've introduced Velocity Boy and Voltshard, I would think Rocky would be concerned about their welfare. And he knew Iron Claw (who until now has been a soul-less prop), so what's going to happen there? And now that Rocky recognizes that he has a hole inside of him, is Colt going to ease up and open his heart to Rocky? Lastly, it's kinda odd that some evil scenes involve sex, but none of the others. It kinda puts gay sex in a bad light. Idea: Maybe Rocky can cure Velocity & Voltshard with good sex! :)

Damn that was hot!!!

@[Rock Creek Werewolf](/user/show/10002145) I am grateful to know my comments are well received. Honestly, it's kind of a miracle Yousef didn't wind up infuriated at Toddson during his little rant- in light of all of his family history Toddson was an utter jerk even more than when I first read him...but he probably knew getting mad wouldn't end well- so he was just saddened and uncomfortable- which is understandable. But I think most of the pack really does not have that experience of clinging to family because you could lose them due to war. They had their struggles, but lived mostly in peacetime conditions- so they had the luxury to leave them and not feel too bad. Though that still leaves them hanging, but it is what it is. Mullin's wife and children probably are just confused and disoriented right now- I would not want to be them right now....though considering his wild antics perhaps they are sad but relieved Mullins is gone. But then again, Mullins was in no shape to continue his marriage and it's best he left. There was just no ending where they'd be able to stay together in Mullin's case. And yes, that family history playing a role does make sense. As much as werewolves are different from humans- they do blend into human society. There are interactions- however much werewolves hold themselves to be superior to humans. And I think this ties right back to the views of the jinn and their behaviors should Yousef take that avenue to understand things (honestly I suspect his dad may bring it up or somebody he runs into). I think what's also interesting is the idea of werewolf superiority which we see from many weres. Ruiz definetely holds to this, but Yousef does not- as we see in his talk with Father Ray. The way the jinn and humans are seen as kindreds in their fates could be something Yousef explores in his own time. What's particularly interesting on that angle is that historically speaking- the jinns were at least to some degree seen as gods (likely tutelary dieties) in the pre-Islamic period (inscriptions in the Hejaz region and in Palmyra and Baalbek have the words for jinn and god often used interchangeably. But yes, Mahmood being a mondjugen potentially has the risk of breaking Yousef's family apart- which would really be the worst case scenario. While Mullins was glad to just get away from his family, I don't see Yousef doing that. He might be a werewolf, but due to his family history- breaking off from family is likely something he'd never entertain unless necessary- and while he was likely trying to do that- something tells me he's going to need to re-evaluate this stance because now his father might get roped into the messiness of werewolf life at worst case. I think him meeting his father is going to be a major wake-up call about how while he may be having a wonderful joyride right now- that comes with it's own price. Yousef is probably going to need to make sure the others don't find out about his dad. That would not end well at all. He was already reeling from what happened to Frank- and I don't think he's going to be so gung ho about sacrificing people after what happened there. Him and Bill seem to be getting closer- and we have to see what comes of that as well. As well as his seer training.... Honestly, if Yousef ever figures out that Ruiz is subtly planning to get Yosuef to forget about his family in light of his meeting with his dad, I don't see that ending well either. As it stands, Yousef's background is a bit different from the other weres, and that will lead to things down the line I suspect.

This is a really great story, but it was very quick. I would love to see a more of a slow burn of this story. Maybe the conversion to the Rubbers becomes more gradual, and more insidious. Making all the men happy and obedient rubber slaves and transforming other students.