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Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 7:53 AM
Like Hypnoguy67, AnonDragon and NewGuyInTown, I agree that this story is well written in terms of characterization, pacing and planning. However, the pure malice in Derrick's action ruined it. They could have accidentally caused the dumbening, which could be reversed, and they could do each other a heavy mental change as reparation. Derrick didn't want to work out and play sports, well, Aaron could reprogram that. The story could have ended so much more benign and enjoyable for all readers. The cruelty is really unnecessary
Rubken
11/14/20, 7:33 AM
Great story, Mal! I loved your stories! Would really turn on by rubber, tattoos, piercings skinhead forced transformation story. Shamed that some of your old stories were disappeared.
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 5:47 AM
Great story, I wish we could have seen a bit more of stage 1 Dumb Aaron interacting with the outside world and perceiving how much he has fallen
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 3:45 AM
Please don't take my comment above as criticism. The story is excellently written, and it is a credit to the author's detailed characterization that I liked the character of Aaron and felt sorry for him when he was too trusting of Derrick. I frequently enjoy the theme of dumbing down, but I found Derrick's motives to be too malicious and that took away the hot factor for me. I respect the time and talent of the author and the fact that others were turned on by it.
11/14/20, 3:12 AM
Another incredible chapter! I just love, love, love seeing Jese's slow path to slutdom. The way Dennis kept repeating to him throughout the chapter how much of a slut he is was so hot to me. Also, I love the way Jese pretends to resist and puts on a show about not actually wanting cock... this just makes everything more special. I also like when you talk about Jese having a fat ass, maybe you could throw in more ass worship and appreciation towards Jese's ass, describe it a little bit more? I think it will be a important step to Jese to focus more and more in his ass and hole now as sexual organs and sources of pleasure, make him more self-conscious about it. Throwing Charlie into the mix was such an interesting move, I could've never foresee this happening! This is why I love your writing so much, you're so creative and inventive. I'd love to read a description of Charlie in the next chapter, tho. Talking about chapters, dude, the pace you're on these days writing and posting so fast is literally giving me life. Please keep this going! I'm super curious to see Jese playing Charlie's mod. I hope is a fantasy MMORPG kinda of game, or some open world one, where Jese can really explore. Also, maybe you can slutty things up a little with this game having very precarious choices of outfits that really exposes Jese's body and ass which makes Jese really pissed off and makes him complain to Charlie, but Charlie brushes it off and explains to him that since it's a new mod he is still working on, he didn't have the chance yet to develop all of the outfit choices (which is a lie, of course, he is doing that on purpose and manipulating Jese so he can ogle Jese's hot body). Jese gets grumpy but accepts his new slutty outfit cause he doesn't really have a choice, he needs to beta the game... Anyway dude, thanks so much for your work, well done again! Cheers!
11/14/20, 2:42 AM
Love a class pants-stealing TF, especially the moment the seams disappear. Plenty to work with here, just sort out your formatting.
Nov 13, 2020
11/14/20, 2:36 AM
I'm with Hypnoguy67 and New Guy in Town - this is normally my kind of story, and I still found it hot regardless, but I don't know...I guess I prefer it when the guy who is the target deserved it, or did so on purpose, or it was an accident...this came off as just a tad too malicious by Derrick for such a silly reason. But it was still well written, and clearly some others are really into it, so I wouldn't worry too much about this random person's opinion - guess this story just wasn't my cup of tea.
11/14/20, 1:31 AM
Whoops, I must've read the last line wrong, I thought Devin entered with Rugby Boy. So he's going to show up at the station part-way through Chapter 20. I wonder what he's going to walk in on. Also, I'm *very* curious to see what had Snake so distracted that he didn't rush to save Rugby Boy...
11/14/20, 1:26 AM
> Devin was able to keep up with the Super Soldiers and run all the way to the police station. > You're a little ahead. They left him behind, but told him where to go and to follow. He's trailing them by about a half hour.
11/14/20, 1:24 AM
> So will we see Devin take his full familiar form in the next chapter? > Poor Devin. I mean, has anyone had to prove himself so damn much? He better get something!