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11/13/20, 3:55 PM
I do believe this is your best work so far. It's definitely more realistic that the sequel and seems that much more attainable for chastity subs like myself, which is what makes it so hot. Absolutely love it. <3
Nov 13, 2020
11/13/20, 3:50 PM
Very hot story!! I really loved the domination towards the end, and wish that part would have drawn out longer. Still awesome nonetheless!!! :)
11/13/20, 3:49 PM
> I’m trying to check my mental math, but are there actually 8 super-soldiers? > Yes, there are eight, but only six "named": the Lieutenant, Staff-Sergeant Wendt, Dobie, Shank, the two "Rabbits" and two un-named (think of them as "Red Shirts" at this point.) > that was some much-needed humor after the drama of Chapter 18 > That's Shakespeare, man! Put some humor in as it gets heavy, otherwise it'll slog itself down in emotional weight. > But knowing the answer Rubbrsome came up with in his sequel series, I’m reluctant to see that happen… > I've said this before as a joke, but it's totally true: Chapter 21 is the Schrödinger's Cat of gay/ sci-fi/ erotic/ alien-invasion stories. You'll see what I mean.
Nov 13, 2020
11/13/20, 3:39 PM
Wow! Super hot! I love the smart jock getting dumbed down. Thanks for this awesome story!
11/13/20, 3:23 PM
TWIST! I was wondering if, perhaps, Rugby Boy was going to escape the fate of becoming Vernon's drooling fuck toy. While Snake seems to be on board with the Deputy now, I can't imagine he's going to be too happy that Vernon tried to steal his boy away from him. Nice to see Devin getting his reward, now we have two familiars on the field... I'm trying to check my mental math, but are there actually 8 super-soldiers? Apart from the Lt. and Dobie, they all kind of blend together in my mind. For some reason I thought it was 6, and Joe plus the Variants makes 10. Also, looks like Bowden wasn't able to keep Joe under his thrall, but the Deputy has his hooks into him again. I did enjoy the rewind to Joe and the Variants, that was some much-needed humor after the drama of Chapter 18. And the noose just seems to be getting tighter around the Hosts. I'm torn between wanting the government to wipe out the Hosts to save humanity from the presumably grim fate the Great Ones have in store for us, but at the same time I want to keep our cast alive, even if it means that narratively, humanity is eventually doomed. Unless Tully is somehow able to work out a solution that allows the Hosts to survive? But knowing the answer Rubbrsome came up with in his sequel series, I'm reluctant to see that happen...
11/13/20, 3:04 PM
To read the "Author's Notes" on this chapter -- head to the [FORUM DISCUSSION](https://forum.gayspiralstories.com/t/pollination-the-discussion/1810/302). There's some inside information there that may give you some clue as to my writing process.
11/13/20, 2:31 PM
@Hypnoguy67, Anon, and everyone else. Thanks! <3 @ Heru I'm unsure how Dennis and Charles will connect. I feel like for the time being, they are cooperative in that they share information to make their games/mods better. They work together on that, but when it comes to bottoms, things are random. Depends on how much they care for them. Just a hot guy, or someone as unique to them as Colin's younger brother. I have not decided a fate for their relationship. For now, I think Charles will try to keep it a secret. I'll see where the story blows. And are you asking about the device that Dennis put inside Jese's computer to hack it? That he would have taken away. He may have snuck something else in Jese's room, but the device to modify his computer was a quick in and out to install remote access. If, that is what you are talking about. @nycboot Thanks thanks! Yeah, I have been having a lot of fun with it. Video games gives it this nice realistic feel. I can pretty much go anywhere with it because "there is a game for that." The community will make sure of it! And yes, my favorite part of hypno writing, is how it is affecting the subject. The change, and the struggle. Although, I just need to make sure I keep exploring those thoughts, as I feel that sometimes I'm trying to push ahead with the story to fast. As for the incoming game, an idea that I have had for a long time. A troublesome adventure, that I just couldn't quite find a proper motivation for Jese to battle through. But by the time I did, I was already working on Star World, and then I figured it would fit perfectly into the story line. Already writing, hopefully I can spit something out soon, Thanks again for reading.
nycboot
11/13/20, 1:56 PM
I already liked this story but it's becoming even more intriguing. The sex is also wonderful because by now we're really tied up with the characters. It's so funny: At the ouset you had Jese appear like some dumb kid brother, very inarticulate, more of a bother than a character. At this point, Jese is the lead character, having pushed Dennis to a lower priority long ago. What I really love about this story - that makes it different from any other story I've read on this site - is that we get to experience all the mental and emotional struggles Jese is going through. I totally love that because it seems much more realistic. It's also hot, seeing Jese struggle in his mind but his body doing something else. And now with the introduction of Charles makes Jese even more wound up. A great idea for the narrative! Looking forward to more!
Anonymous
11/13/20, 12:51 PM
Please make another chapter
Anonymous
11/13/20, 12:43 PM
Please make another chapter! This is hot