Recent Comments

Maxigay
11/12/20, 1:38 PM
Very good story, all reference to uniforms and rubber makes it very morbid, perhaps Ng5hvlo4's comment about the hasty in the conversion of a leader is very fast, the same in the capture of his children, perhaps if the idea was to be a continuous series She would have faced more calmly, it all depends now if you follow her which would be fantastic.
Anonymous
11/12/20, 1:20 PM
Tyler reminds me of German Shepherd ,which means that he needs to be trained well ; )
11/12/20, 12:57 PM
Fuckin amazing Boss,
Luke
11/12/20, 12:53 PM
The description of the dramatic tension between Tyler and Robin is terrific, never have I ever shipped a couple like this pair before. Cannot wait to see how Tyler work hard, hoping to impress the professor.
11/12/20, 12:12 PM
This. Is. GREAT!!!
Ng5hvlo4
11/12/20, 12:11 PM
it is a good start, but it was difficult to follow the dialogue (using " " and new paragraphs for that would help), and while the introduction and MC scenes were well thought out, it felt rushed to get to the point where the recruit became a Squad Leader and went out to the streets with the others (who were not mentioned at all before then, making it feel out of place). The rubber aspect was a nice touch, but (at least for me) the smoking aspect took away from the hot factor; I'm sure others will disagree with me on that point.
11/12/20, 10:25 AM
Well done on the story so far, I'm a sucker for a man in a slutty outfit, so it's always nice to see that transformation. And there's something great to the "friends rewritten as lovers" parts that appear also. Diversity is always fun, though it's sad that it makes the collages more difficult to pull together. Obviously there needs to be greater revealing clothes representation for men everywhere. As for suggestions, I'd second the staff needing some more attention. Maybe a scantily-costumed tout on the street to help get more customers in. The other idea that I've had rattling around for a while was a bachelor party. Obnoxious as a group, but quickly converted to a slutty wedding party, when the best man is promoted to other groom. Anyway, keep up the good work!
Mr E
11/12/20, 9:24 AM
@Lusty Stallion the pictures are always a nice feature in these stories. My idea was a group of white people turn into those ethnicities. Maybe like a bouncer in the club or more club staff. No matter where you take the story I can't wait to read it.
Anonymous
11/12/20, 9:24 AM
It's a good start. Looking forward to what comes next.
11/12/20, 8:22 AM
Always good to have MAL back.