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11/9/20, 6:47 PM
Hot story, bro!
11/9/20, 6:25 PM
One got left behind, then there were seven...brilliant interpretation of General McKenzie/MacArthur! The "lost love." My money is still on Theo the wizard for the impostor (if there even IS an impostor), but I agree that TP8Z is right with saying that Jen might be the only survivor. So next up we have someone getting chopped in half--but given the nature of this site, why do I feel like SPLITTING in half might be the way things go? :p
11/9/20, 6:11 PM
This is really enjoyable to read. Looking forward to seeing what happens next.
Nov 9, 2020
Anonymous
11/9/20, 5:45 PM
Hot concept, but felt like it trailed off too quickly towards the end. Would have loved to see you pad things out more
11/9/20, 4:23 PM
Dude, honestly, either way I'm totally cool with it LOL! This stuff horns me up so much thinking sure isn't my strong point by the end, but it feels too damn good not to. So sure I might be a dumbass cuz of it LOL but then I get off CUZ I'm a dumbass... That sounded better in my head. So I guess both?? But who's complaining?? Hehehe
11/9/20, 4:11 PM
This was meant as a single chapter story since for me it was mostly about the picture and the story around that. The story also did fairly terrible on tumblr and the ratings here weren't splendid either, but I might write a sequel to it since i've also gotten some messages about it.
11/9/20, 3:46 PM
@Heru Yeah, the moment with Christine was one that I was unsure of putting in, or made me consider that Christine should have just been Chris, and Chris could have taught Jese to be a good bottom. Mixed it up, people will have different opinions. Originally they weren't going to mess around together, and I just wanted her to instill that "hole" mentality in him. And yeah, the game could easily make moments where you can't get caught, or present situations in which you think you might. It was fun to mess around with. What if the Cafe was a secret orgy place!! "CHRISTINE YOU JER-MRLLFFF" <-- cock plugging mouth. @Elmara Glad you enjoyed it, and also happy to surprise fans of the series and my foolish writings. Your comment doesn't even really need a response from me. It pretty much answers itself. But yeah, missed opportunity with a power bottom move by "Chris". I mostly didn't feel like going back to fix up Christine to Chris. Stories like this, I just like to write forward instead of planning, so thats its surprise and an experience to me. Christine was really only suppose to give Jese some advice. Then I got turned on by the "image" of who was playing Christine, and... yeah. I like where Jese is, and you hit it pretty well. He is accepting these new feelings, but he is hiding them. He would very much like to just be a slut, but he can't let himself do that. Problem is, the more he becomes comfortable with it, well, Dennis can just take bigger shots. He might pretend to hate Dennis calling him a slut, but in his mind, he likes it. The Mindgear is a powerful machine, and its made Jese very much enjoy, things...
11/9/20, 3:46 PM
> Also glad to see Tully finally seeing the fate of Murdock as a mindless “drone.” > Speaking of that vignette, did anybody notice the cameo of the Scientist and the General from Book One?
11/9/20, 2:54 PM
Can't wait for next chapter
11/9/20, 2:26 PM
WTF!!! Uhmmm....the next chapter/s, where might they be? I'm invested with the story & characters. Don't leave me hanging, I need closure. So yes, I'm enjoying the read...so far Don't know who the pretender is. It's not Jen, however I think she is the only one to walk away in the morning. There has to be a witness. Someone to tell the tale. Her offense is the least offensive. She is redeemable. Plus she is a girl that knows how to take care of herself & won't hesitate to karate chop off the dick of any monster trying to do her harm. I'm right...Right? Looking forward to finding out...soon