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11/9/20, 2:56 AM
Another genius Derek Williams story. No one does the "be careful what you wish for" theme better than you!
11/9/20, 1:26 AM
The deputy had earned a plant but was put on hold because Tully had only interacted with him posing as the Sheriff. The Sheriff thought it wouldn't be the last time they saw her. So could a human that had ingested the cum from two pollinated alphas been controlled as a Great One? It appears the symbiotic relationship is too great? It would have been a fun twist to see the Deputy kneel before Snake but not the Sheriff. And Snake turn on the Sheriff and eventually loose control of the deputy. The Sheriff wouldn't have known he was double-crossed because he took his eye off his balls when filling in for the mayor. Our libidos can image different situations that could drag the story on forever. A testament to your brilliance.
11/9/20, 12:57 AM
Now this I like. It's hot, a novel concept, and it's modeled on my favorite horror film. It's also, dare I say, inspirational ;)
Anonymous
11/9/20, 12:55 AM
excellent excellent work...thanks !!
11/9/20, 12:18 AM
@MonsterMash62 - Fuck man, I just meant to write a quick jerk off story. Now I've got to be thinking about sequels! (Seriously, that's a good idea, I'll put it in the idea box, no promise if it'll ever happen.) @Transformheaven - Thank you sir. Probably not perfect, but good enough to share.
11/9/20, 12:03 AM
Thank you for your comments! @PupScout you make great points, and the sex drive of the soldiers is actually part of the development of the story. thank you for your tips :) @Lakritz24 I see what you mean, and I agree with you. this story is meant to be a dystopia, these are not good guys. I'll try to make that point clearer as it goes on
11/8/20, 11:32 PM
Another perfect story
Lakritz24
11/8/20, 11:19 PM
Uih, sehr gefährliche Gedanken. Meiner Meinung nach hätte das so nicht gedacht, geschrieben und herausgegeben werden sollen. Oh-oh.
11/8/20, 11:19 PM
Hot as always! Feels like a part one maybe. Like part two would be the narrator figuring out what happened, or coming to term with the fact that his ideal guy wanted to string him along and make him do all the work. Be super hot to have him see the changes Ethan’s spell made in him too.
11/8/20, 10:42 PM
> I remember another omission from Book One that was removed on this site. Bowden emerged as the great one and after he evolved Murdock he planted a personal garden. It didn’t make sense for him to be creating competing Great Ones. Unless his seed would create just the Guard class of symbiotes. > Yes. Exactly why I removed it. Way back when I wrote it, I think I had the idea that he was planning to create a Warrior Class, but it just seemed superfluous in Book Two, so I cut it. > When the Sheriff told Snake the new great one would be a host We control, the Sheriff wasn’t talking about Snake and himself he meant himself and his ball residing symbiote. > Absolutely correct. Because of their human relationship, I think the Sheriff just expected the Deputy to submit to him and allow himself to be controlled by the Sheriff. But it turned out the Deputy held all the power (as bottoms always do) and all he had to do was patiently wait his turn. I'm not sure the Sheriff had always intended to make the Deputy a Great One -- you may remember, he'd only promised the Deputy a plant of his own when the time was right. It wasn't until he realized the Kansas Great One had created strategic flaws that I believe he amended his plan and decided to promote the Deputy, believing the Deputy easiest to control.