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11/7/20, 1:58 PM
Plus I think letting the characters retain their personality creates hope in the reader, even if it's false hope, that the enslavement can somehow be reversed. Death of personality is usually only good for demonstrating the direness of the situation, or as the climax of a story. Once a character is a mindless drone, there's no opportunity for character growth, they are at best an obstacle for your protagonists to have to deal with at some point.
11/7/20, 12:50 PM
sorry it's title is actually "unintended wish: gaining confidence" it has very short snippets about the two gym shower scenes. Thank you for catching that, and the feedback 😄
11/7/20, 12:46 PM
still good story though
11/7/20, 12:46 PM
what part is the series is unitended wish: a boost of confidence from? (if not ur story than who?)
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11/7/20, 12:28 PM
I like the High Fantasy Gone Wrong thing you've got going on. This is like a pie in the face for all those grand adventurers, their careers ended in utter embarrassment. Great!
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11/7/20, 12:22 PM
So hot! Please continue it
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11/7/20, 12:14 PM
This was so good!!! Please make one with the dad!
11/7/20, 11:20 AM
> That complete erasure of personhood and the destruction of genuine emotional connection (be it between parents and children or true lovers) like it is nothing is *horrific*. > 100% agreed! That's why I went there rather than mind-wiped slavehood. This allows the Hosts to retain their personalities -- rather than just be drones -- but have motivation to obey, however severely misguided it may be.
11/7/20, 11:15 AM
> It reminded me of storylines from the old Batman series, where Marsha the Queen of Diamonds... would use a potion or pheromone perfume to make men fall in love with her. > That particular episode is ingrained in my head -- it was the first time I realized mind-control got my little tween penis hard. Or maybe it was Burt Ward's acting skills.
11/7/20, 9:55 AM
Love your story. We NEED the next chapters. please ❤️