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11/7/20, 2:51 PM
Glad to hear Rubbersome is doing well and hopefully his life will calm down soon. I read his work over and over again. This chapter was amazing. Each one some how improves upon the one before. I had a feeling the Sheriff would not be able to maintain his hold over the deputy. The Sheriff was never capable of loving the deputy. That bond needed to be there before both of them were joined with a symbiote. Joe was a strong enough alpha and had a fatherly love for his son that he could resist. Tony's young lust out weighed his love for his father. I'm happy to see Vernon found Rugby Boy. My own twisted mind has thought about the three Variants creating a plant baby that's gigantic bloom could engulf Rugby Boy's entire body. Maybe it wouldn't create a new great one or greater one but a new hybrid with all three abilities. But that plant wouldn't work in the amazing garden we are strolling or sashaying through. Reading this section among others in this chapter did it for me. > Power. > > He was flexing and deep-breathing and thrusting and moaning – and he felt something slip down the slit of his cock. A wet vine, a flat-backed eel, a whisper-thin tentacle – it entered him. Something living slid inside – erotic and horrifying. He was so close. > > And this creature settled into his balls, swelling to full-size, weighing them down. He felt it trying to connect with him – rudimentary communication – emotional stimuli, images, as if it were discovering the pathway to language. > > I am. You. With I. Me. Us are. WE are. Together. > > The brink of orgasm. > > Join me. > > Ecstasy! > > Joyous, mind-numbing pleasure. Acceptance – rope after rope of cum – of godseed. > > We. Us. We are… > As I was about to cum this time and other times during this chapter the thought crossed my mind. "HAIL GREAT ABSMAN!"
11/7/20, 2:30 PM
> I think letting the characters retain their personality creates hope in the reader, even if it’s false hope, that the enslavement can somehow be reversed > Beyond that, there's a question of who to trust? If someone's a mindless drone, we pretty much know whose side they're on. If a character retains their personality, until they utter their allegiance, we don't know what they believe. It creates a layer of paranoia I like.
11/7/20, 1:58 PM
Plus I think letting the characters retain their personality creates hope in the reader, even if it's false hope, that the enslavement can somehow be reversed. Death of personality is usually only good for demonstrating the direness of the situation, or as the climax of a story. Once a character is a mindless drone, there's no opportunity for character growth, they are at best an obstacle for your protagonists to have to deal with at some point.
11/7/20, 12:50 PM
sorry it's title is actually "unintended wish: gaining confidence" it has very short snippets about the two gym shower scenes. Thank you for catching that, and the feedback 😄
11/7/20, 12:46 PM
still good story though
11/7/20, 12:46 PM
what part is the series is unitended wish: a boost of confidence from? (if not ur story than who?)
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11/7/20, 12:28 PM
I like the High Fantasy Gone Wrong thing you've got going on. This is like a pie in the face for all those grand adventurers, their careers ended in utter embarrassment. Great!
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11/7/20, 12:22 PM
So hot! Please continue it
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11/7/20, 12:14 PM
This was so good!!! Please make one with the dad!
11/7/20, 11:20 AM
> That complete erasure of personhood and the destruction of genuine emotional connection (be it between parents and children or true lovers) like it is nothing is *horrific*. > 100% agreed! That's why I went there rather than mind-wiped slavehood. This allows the Hosts to retain their personalities -- rather than just be drones -- but have motivation to obey, however severely misguided it may be.