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Mark
10/31/20, 9:09 PM
Amazing start. Can't wait for the next part!
Anonymous
10/31/20, 9:07 PM
thought there was gonna be more chapters?
Anonymous
10/31/20, 6:49 PM
is this the end or is there gonna be a put 4?
Anonymous
10/31/20, 6:48 PM
I'm also waiting to see if theres a part 5
Anonymous
10/31/20, 5:51 PM
This is so great, love the tension built...
Moby
10/31/20, 5:31 PM
@Hypno-Tales hehe gald to hear it made ya laugh~ I like injecting some light hearted bits into stories sometimes, but im not always sure if it works. Glad to see it did here
Anonymous
10/31/20, 4:16 PM
Here's hoping Brad starts watching, too. Watching the videos as a nice couple activity
10/31/20, 1:44 PM
yes please continue with this story.
10/31/20, 11:31 AM
> Wait, I just noticed something: Wizwell is MIA. > Confession: I didn't know what to do with the Wizard. It's possible he was transformed, of course -- right there in the hornets nest, that's the most obvious conclusion. It's possible on the first day, when all the symbionts were compelled to the field, that Vance's power over the Wizard wore off and -- as you say -- he just got the hell out of Dodge (or in this case, Garden City). Frankly, I left him out of the story for the same reason I got rid of Mr. Mac -- it was just one more character that I would have to deal with that I didn't need. Replacing Mr. Mac with Joe gives me a humorous bit to work with -- Mr. Mac likes the boys' flagrant sexuality, and Joe is put off by it. The boys' constant attempts at seduction become funnier with Joe constantly rejecting them. You'll see a little more of this relationship in chap 19. There is a "role call" of sorts in chap 21, which I'm writing as I respond to this, where I have to decide the Wizard's fate one way or the other. We'll see what I write.
10/31/20, 11:01 AM
Wait, I just noticed something: Wizwell is MIA. I completely glossed over it in the heat of the moment, but in the process of rereading the chapter, I noticed that Joe only volunteers to drive when the Variants mention that they don't know where their driver is. I'm going to go out on a limb and say that Wizwell got the hell out of dodge when they all got to the farm. Knowing you, I have a feeling that's going to come into play in a future chapter.