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10/31/20, 1:44 PM
yes please continue with this story.
10/31/20, 11:31 AM
> Wait, I just noticed something: Wizwell is MIA. > Confession: I didn't know what to do with the Wizard. It's possible he was transformed, of course -- right there in the hornets nest, that's the most obvious conclusion. It's possible on the first day, when all the symbionts were compelled to the field, that Vance's power over the Wizard wore off and -- as you say -- he just got the hell out of Dodge (or in this case, Garden City). Frankly, I left him out of the story for the same reason I got rid of Mr. Mac -- it was just one more character that I would have to deal with that I didn't need. Replacing Mr. Mac with Joe gives me a humorous bit to work with -- Mr. Mac likes the boys' flagrant sexuality, and Joe is put off by it. The boys' constant attempts at seduction become funnier with Joe constantly rejecting them. You'll see a little more of this relationship in chap 19. There is a "role call" of sorts in chap 21, which I'm writing as I respond to this, where I have to decide the Wizard's fate one way or the other. We'll see what I write.
10/31/20, 11:01 AM
Wait, I just noticed something: Wizwell is MIA. I completely glossed over it in the heat of the moment, but in the process of rereading the chapter, I noticed that Joe only volunteers to drive when the Variants mention that they don't know where their driver is. I'm going to go out on a limb and say that Wizwell got the hell out of dodge when they all got to the farm. Knowing you, I have a feeling that's going to come into play in a future chapter.
Jason
10/31/20, 10:40 AM
This was amazing! Please write a continuation, it really needs to continue.
Lex
10/31/20, 10:03 AM
why are there always rebels in perfect worlds ? ;) (not a question i need answers for) I love this drone universe :) i would like to see a normal drone enhanced to a far more loyal and obedient security Drone. Why are the drones color coded, if they had a hud in their masks ? how are their reproduction cycle ? Are there raids to align the rebels into the system ? What happens, if some drone accidentally get POLLuted from some symbiontplant from POLLINATION and get a symbiont into his balls ? So many questions. Can't wait for chapter 2 ;))
10/31/20, 4:34 AM
Oh, and the part about when Matt steps on the cum-stained floor and he starts saying "Get it off, getioffgetitoffgetitoff!" it made me laugh. I liked it x3
10/31/20, 4:31 AM
@Moby It is definitely one of the best types of hypnosis. I intend to write a story with that kind of concept, long and subtle induction with a small group of tough friends trying to keep the spell free ... and failing, of course. I have some ideas. Your story has been excellent :) And I like how you made everything cute and naughty. And it's your story, you are in control. As I say I loved everything, I just liked Billy a lot, the way he fell first and faster I liked it, also he seemed kind and loving with his friends, and I admit that I wanted to see Billy trying have sex or something with his friends unaware of his own transformation. But the story is perfectly as it is. Awww, I love the Frankenstein costume x3
10/31/20, 3:48 AM
Glad to see the next phase of the drone world and that you completed the draft of this chapter. It's very enjoyable and I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with it.
Anonymous
10/31/20, 3:03 AM
This could be have been developed into a short three installment series. It was rushed, but it was hot!!!
10/31/20, 2:25 AM
Yeah, but I like where its going. It's already looks like Brad is overdoing it, Stuart might end more Trucker and Redneckier than him.