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Ng5hvlo4
10/31/20, 1:31 AM
A good comment; thank you. Let me explain. The stories as they are now are not wholly complete. The first series shows the beginning of some changes that lead to a few drones. The second series shows those drones serving human masters, While slowly introducing how the numbers of drones increases. What's missing in the second series is how the number of drones has increased so dramatically that we get to the third series. The third series is when most of humanity are drones, now in service to the Artificial intelligence that started it all, Jake. I'm working on all three series in parallel because that is how my inspiration strikes me. It's hard to write only one setting; it's easier if I can jump back-and-forth. It gives the chance to communicate with the readers and refine. And it's not like I planned all of this when I first started writing; it has evolved. This evolution has prompted an ongoing series of stories and refinements to existing stories that is still ongoing and that will only get better by communications such as these.
Moby
10/31/20, 1:17 AM
@ Hypno-Tales Thank you so much! I'm really happy you enjoyed it~ For me, slow burn is the best type for mind control. Following a protagonist that is resistant at first and them seeing all the weird changes around, not noticing it's happening to them too. As for Billy, I admit I never really had that much planned for him. The main two characters were always going to be Matt and Conor. Billy was there to be the one who changes fast so that the two could interact with someone going through the changes. But if I had to say where Billy fell a hundred percent into his trance, I'd say it was during gym class, with the Master paying the team a visit and making them fall completley and having them stop playing the game and start screwing right then and there. As for his costume, Billy was meant to be a Frankstein's Monster. Tattered shirt with a jacket over top, dark hair. I kinda forgot to add the detail of the two metal pegs on his neck. My bad~
10/31/20, 12:52 AM
I loved it. From beginning to end. Since I'm neither English nor American, I can't comment on the speech and accents, but I liked the little details like Conor singing "metric" when Matt talked about miles, for example. What I have liked the most is undoubtedly the slow evolution of the story, the subtle progressive way in which they fall into a collective trance. The way Billy doesn't realize the food tastes sweet, or the way he wears a tattered black shirt ... or how Conor and Matt think they're going without any change but they're barefoot. Overall, I found it to be a delightful story, charming as well as sexy, funny and intriguing. And I really liked the different cute costumes. If I had to mention something that I would have liked to be different, it would be that I wish I had had more interventions from Billy. I would have liked to see more about that strong boy friend of Conor and Matt, he seemed like a very interesting and charming (and sexy) character, and I would have liked to have seen a scene where we see him completely fall into a trance. Or that he had a naughty role in the finale, when Matt is tied up in the chair. And I'm not sure what his costume was. Other than that, this is a great story!
10/31/20, 12:51 AM
> As nycboot said above, the military guys didn’t interest him. I felt the same way. > It's my fault! I had to slow them down by a day, because I realized if they'd gotten out when I wanted them to -- around chap14 -- at their speed, they would be too far away when I needed them. So I had to stall them and that slowed the sub-plot's energy. I'll make up for it in future action. I'll win you over yet.
Shadow
10/31/20, 12:21 AM
this was hot. id love to see some of tommy's physical changes next chapter after ethans suggestion. and maybe ethan might start bulking up?
Maxigay
10/31/20, 12:18 AM
In previous stories, the function of a drone was to serve its human Master, if society is now made up of drones, what has happened with the continuity of the other stories.
10/30/20, 11:42 PM
As nycboot said above, the military guys didn't interest him. I felt the same way. I still do, not in a bad sense, just in a preference rating. But the escape scene excelled. It was alive and full of action with an erotic undertone, and the smell of sweat, that we have all fantasied about seeing in military or action movies. I very much enjoyed it. When Dobie went into Spiderman mode, my only thought was my face in his ass.
Lusty Stallion
10/30/20, 10:42 PM
Thanks Darkblade. That would be fun. And Anon - have you been peeking magically at the next part? spandex clad superheroes are coming. i just wanted to get this one out while I had time. i'd planned it to be longer
Anonymous
10/30/20, 10:26 PM
Great series. Only complaint is the installments are too short. . . But that must mean it's good!