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nycboot
10/30/20, 7:23 PM
A wonderful chapter - thank you! It's interesting that at the outset, it seems as if the symbiont totally took over the human host. But now we see that there's a lot of nuance there (at least for now?). The soldier subplot never really interested me that much but I see it supplies a lot of momentum and build up to the various threads. You didn't mention it here but I'm really curious about the new "Great One" and what's to become of the deputy. It seems that when a human becomes a great one, most of his human desires are removed and he's just a vessel for the symbiont. Anyway, lots of good stuff to ponder and j/o to. :)
10/30/20, 7:03 PM
Definitely have to agree that it's a bit rushed. Emilio has all the time in the world, so he could really sink his hooks not only into Hank but into the other guards. Hell he could be running the prison if he wanted to. The idea asks for a slow burn approach to it.
Tanner
10/30/20, 6:57 PM
Thanks for the kind words everyone. I have really enjoyed writing this. And good suggestions tiny tim. I will do my best to write more as soon as I can. The nice comments definitely help motivate me.
10/30/20, 6:40 PM
So is the Lieutenant going to make Devin a full symbiont or just a familiar? I propose familiar since it would fit into the military hierarchy; Devin did come through for them but they still gotta see if he has the material to be a member of the squad full time.
10/30/20, 5:39 PM
It did seem a bit rushed. Would like to have read more of Hank's transition from ladies' man to cocksucker.
10/30/20, 5:33 PM
Little sad that this change made him forget/unaware of what the wish did to him. Nice to see his "friends" getting sucked into it too. Keep up the hot work :)
10/30/20, 4:10 PM
A good second chapter. I especially like the suggestion's changing Tommy's past memories at the end of the chapter...This was a tease, however...wish there had been a few more memory changes...Always enjoy stories where a bro's current behavior is altered due to the implant of false prior memories...In addition to sucking his thumb, perhaps Tommy should need to , sleep with his favorite childhood teddy bear, wet his pants when he gets excited., be shy & fearful around manly [Alpha] guys, remembering the implanted memory of being bullied throughout high school, [but feeling that somehow he deserved this treatment..looking-up to his bully's !] It shouldn't take too long for Tommy's new childish behavior [& desire to suck nerd;s cocks to be noticed by the his fellow students around campus & their behavior and treatment of him to change dramatically . Of course he should expect & welcome it. Also the college Bully's should take notice of this and get-to-work !!! .....PLEASE DON'T KEEP US WAITING TO LONG FOR CHAPTER 3, can't wait for his brother to get back & make a few more changes !!!.....Thank you.
10/30/20, 4:07 PM
Joe somehow being resistant was not a possibility I had considered- I hope we get an explanation/confirmation soon. And I'm not saying that I would've preferred personality erasure- the Hosts going from dreading death to embracing the possibility of being utterly consumed for the Great One's plan is a great moment. And I'm now imagining a deliciously twisted scene of the Great One exacting punishment on a more-than-willing Tony for Joe's defiance. And the Lieutenant seems to be striking a nice middle ground between Lane and Snake when comparing their relationships to their respective human thralls.
10/30/20, 4:03 PM
> The “HAIL GREAT ONE” scene is the kind of thing I’ve been hoping to see for weeks, and you didn’t disappoint! > > Agreed, sometimes you just want to read a bunch of hypno slaves pledge loyalty to their overlord in unison. > You're going to love how I tighten the screws over the next few chapters, then. The emotional investment we've been making in these characters pays off when they're suddenly put in jeopardy, doesn't it?
10/30/20, 3:54 PM
> It seems that one’s enthrallment to the Great One is proportionate to how much damage his healing repaired. > OR that Joe is somehow resistant to the Great One's power. > I was expecting Joe to have to watch Tony and all the other men turn into blank-faced drones > Honestly, I thought it would be much more horrific if they WANTED the Great One to destroy them, like they'd get off on it. > I’m curious to see if the Lt. plans to simply turn Devin into his familiar like Lane and Snake did with the Deputy and Rugby Boy, or if he’s going to reward him with a plant of his own > My intent is that the Lieutenant always be a man of his word -- I consider him honorable. I don't think he's the kind of guy that would promise something and then pull something shady. When they were in the Holding Facility, there was no way they could create plants. Once released, it will take them at least a day to create a plant, much less the transformation time. As of chapter 17, they haven't had the time to do any of this. But I believe that the Lieutenant intends to keep his word and transform Devin -- they just gotta have the moment.