Recent Comments

10/28/20, 11:29 AM
Just reread this again. Hoping that you're sfae and well and that you have a new story in the works! Your writing is amazing, and I would love to see more!
10/28/20, 11:03 AM
amazing chapter,was definitely worth the wait. Intrigued to see what's wrong with Carter... And I agree to the comments above,we hope to see more of captain David. Can't let such a big burly powerful man walk around without a good fuck
10/28/20, 10:18 AM
This was a fantastic story. Love the older brother being controlled by the younger. Hope they both end up at the same college.
Oct 2, 2006
10/28/20, 10:11 AM
> I enjoyed the start of the story. I am looking forward to reading additional chapters. > I just re-read it myself a few weeks ago to submit it to a story contest. It holds up well. I still am glad the SERIES doesn't directly sequel it, tho. I like the ending as it reads.
10/28/20, 8:07 AM
So great! I missed this story. I hope we can see more of David in the future :)
10/28/20, 7:50 AM
to put my raving review short: great chapter. Love cops. Love obliviousness. Came multiple times while reading. Hope Matt gets fucked good soon. Hope his boys will be in on it,too
10/28/20, 7:45 AM
wow it's worth the wait, i like your story so far. but i hope the MC makes the police captain to be more feminine and girly towards the MC. anyway good job man, you are good writer.
Anonymous
10/28/20, 5:39 AM
Wow, this was really great. Can't wait for chapter 2!
10/28/20, 5:29 AM
If I understood Hypnothrill correctly, he wasn't so much complaining about the length of what I wrote overall so much as he thinks it should have been written as two or more chapters, just to keep the chapter size more manageable. If this hadn't been so neatly divided into 4 chapters (Dad, Sean, Ethan, and Dad again to finish), I might've considered it. By way of comparison, I have an upcoming "chapter" for Web of Trust that's going to be about the same length, but because it's part of an ongoing series and has nice places to split, I'll actually be releasing it as three chapters once it's complete.
Anonymous
10/28/20, 5:24 AM
I really enjoyed this. I like different kinds of stories but it just is such a treat to get stories like this that have such a well-written slow build. I've been waiting for this ever since it was mentioned on the forum and it did not disappoint.