Wow, this was really great. Can't wait for chapter 2!

If I understood Hypnothrill correctly, he wasn't so much complaining about the length of what I wrote overall so much as he thinks it should have been written as two or more chapters, just to keep the chapter size more manageable. If this hadn't been so neatly divided into 4 chapters (Dad, Sean, Ethan, and Dad again to finish), I might've considered it. By way of comparison, I have an upcoming "chapter" for Web of Trust that's going to be about the same length, but because it's part of an ongoing series and has nice places to split, I'll actually be releasing it as three chapters once it's complete.

I really enjoyed this. I like different kinds of stories but it just is such a treat to get stories like this that have such a well-written slow build. I've been waiting for this ever since it was mentioned on the forum and it did not disappoint.

I enjoyed the start of the story. I am looking forward to reading additional chapters.

@hypnothrill I did not finish it in one sitting either but I still kept coming back to read it all because it was so good. Long writing can be tedious I understand: if the writing is bad. But the writing and the hypnosis/mind control procedure was so detailed and well crafted (not just put you under and take your clothes off lazy writing) that it felt good to be patient in completing it. Idk I guess I prefer something well thought out but very long and slow over multiple pumped out stories that takes one sitting to read and can be pumped out simultaneously by the author but is basic as hell and sometimes leave you dissatisfied. Sometimes quantity just works, especially when the author composes it well and knows how to take their time with it. Might not be your cup of tea but I do implore you to read the whole story.

just sitting here waiting for chap 15 :)

@SkySoda: Don't get me wrong; I also loved the slow pace and level of detail. I just wasn't able to finish it all in one sitting. In fact, I stopped reading after the first scene at Vincente's house, and I haven't yet gone back to finish the chapter.

*Whew.* This story is both kinda disturbing and also so damn hot. The dog-headed men with their addictive, aphrodisiac cum, which can break a man's mind if they cum in him because it feels so damn good... Then, them thinking they're going to set out and start "conquering" humans... and immediately getting captured and having their own cum turned on themselves... Oh man. Cotton watching his older brother "break" under the influence of his own cum, and then knowing it's about to happen to him too— Also, this moment where the intelligent, cocky Tristin is close to "breaking" and practically begging for it, and starts licking his captor's hand: > **–Wanna break!–** He wiggled against the frame. One of the humans tentatively extended a hand in front of Tristin’s face. He sniffed it and then started lazily licking at it. *Whew.*

Dude, what an incredible chapter! I wasn't expecting you to update this fast and to actually go all the way like this! This one exceeded all expectations. Everything was so sexy: the sitting on lap and boucing on Dennis crotch, the slutty jock, the sneaking around, Jese fully embracing his inner slut, the rimming, all the dirty talk and the incredibly hot sex these two had. Fuck man, you really outdone yourself! This has become one of my favorite stories, and I'm sure I'll go back to it a lot in the future. Now that Jese accepted his cockslut status, I really, really want to see how this will actually play out inside Star World. Although Dennis domination of Jese is already complete, I think at least one aspect of the manipulation shouldn't change, and that is the manipulation inside the game. I hope Dennis will keep playing with Jese and that Jese never finds out about Dennis mod, and with what happened already, Dennis takes things up a notch inside the game to make things even more sexy and "ecchi". I would love to see Jese embracing a full fledge slutty style inside the game, in part due to Dennis mod but in part because himself now identifies as slut, meaning completely slutty and skimpy permanent outfits for Jese (exposing his fat ass and tight hole at all times) and in-game created situations in which Jese and Dennis have to fuck or do naughty stuff to complete missions and quests, with more butt near face moments, rimming, humping, blowjobs, anal sex, etc. It would be incredible if things in the game start getting increasingly sexual, with Jese not only getting fucked by Dennis inside the game but actually having to put out for other NPC's or even players as well, with Dennis controlling all the strings, obviously. It will be incredible hot if this happens with Jese not actually knowing or realizing it's because of the mod, so maybe he rationalizes this weird changes due to his new self. Now that they finally did it in real life, I'm mostly interested in seeing this all playing out inside the game in a new arch, because in the game everything is possible. As always, these are just suggestions. I can't wait to read more from you, my friend. Outstanding job! Cheers!

Awe that was cute! In a slightly twisted way...