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10/24/20, 1:42 PM
Maybe Dad and Jeremy could also branch out. Maybe feminize Jer a bit more, so Dad has a girl/boy to sub for him.
anonymous
10/24/20, 12:54 PM
how about having conquering bruce, get a REAL ALPHA, like a superhero! a super straight, moral, but flirtatious with women superhero, a 6'6, 375 pounds of mountain of muscle encased in a leotard outfit that leaves nothing to the imagination from the front or the back, but because he's SUPREME MAN (his name) the public ignores this,, to say he is drop dead gorgeous and breathtaking so is putting it lightly.... getting this superhero forever under his control, capturing, conquering and converting him (secretly of course, the rest of the world still thinks the superhero is thee epitome of virile heterosexuality) he no longer needs Bruce or any man...
Anonymous
10/24/20, 12:21 PM
ilive to serve the virus
10/24/20, 12:16 PM
> I hope Tully makes it out OK–I know she’s a relatively small character, but I’ve felt for her since the very beginning (plus I do like Gillian Anderson!). > I like Gillian Anderson, too -- I even like Tully, although Tully reminds me a little of Lois Lane sometimes. Like, c'mon Lois, you never noticed the glasses and the slouched posture and the vocal timbre and the big muscles under that cheap suit...???? I like smart characters -- and I hated that Tully couldn't figure it all out faster. I think she would've if not for the needs of the plot. Still, for obvious reasons, you'll see she continues to cling to the idea of "saving" the human host, even though as a forensic scientist, she knows that may not be possible. Now, a little extra truth-telling, since we're discussing Tully: a little upthread I spoke of one of the driving images of this series, the seeding of the farm, but there are several others -- all of which I'll talk about after Book Two has been completely released. One of these includes Tully -- and to be honest, it's the reason I've kept her around.
10/24/20, 11:34 AM
What a great chapter. I hope Tully makes it out OK--I know she's a relatively small character, but I've felt for her since the very beginning (plus I do like Gillian Anderson!). As others have said, you've also done a great job pivoting from eroticism to horror--we get so caught up in the fantasy of becoming a hugely muscled giant that we forget that these are alien creatures threatening to subsume the identities of every man on Earth in the name of "repopulation." And now all of the sudden, we're reminded of that through the assembly line-like seeding and the devoured Deputy. Fantastic stuff! :)
10/24/20, 11:17 AM
> I didn’t like the feminization of the soldiers: “honey,” throwing a kiss, sashay. > That's just Dobie -- he's an asshole. Can I argue that I don't see it as feminization, I see it as playful? As a musical-theatre snob (nerd), I imagine them as being the chorus boys (seabies) in SOUTH PACIFIC, friendly banter that's harmless, but supportive of the main scene. I just wanted a bit of "color commentary" in the midst of some really banal exposition.
10/24/20, 9:46 AM
Nate is getting better at playing with his werewolf - that's promising for later chapters!
Anonymous
10/24/20, 3:27 AM
Great story!! Loved it!!!!
Sexcrab
10/24/20, 3:04 AM
Luke was so easy to hypnotize that he may be secretly gay (or bisexual). The hypno master may be pulling the right strings without know.
boi98229
10/24/20, 2:07 AM
Hot! *Hotter!* Now what? I really like the way the story is progressing. The potential trap here now is making the abduction and confirmation of the 3rd slave just more of the same. For the last one, you will need to step up the game and make it substantially different (more!) than the first two. You will need to run into additional complications, such as discovery of the plot by an outside interest or a mild (but controllable?) rebellion involving one or all, or something more than you did during the abductions of the first two. I would also suggest that you start defining what it is that Daniel wants to do with his new slaves. Why did he want slaves? How is he going to run his household? What sort of relationships develop and evolve with the new circumstances for the three friends and for the new Master? Does Daniel have a playroom/dungeon? Are you going to paint a picture of the dungeon for the reader? How about the rest of the home and the grounds? Does it play an important role in the evolving story? What about sex!? ;)) How long do you want to make your story? How are you going to maintain interest for the reader? I am really curious and eager to see how you decide to develop the story!