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10/23/20, 9:11 PM
Aw that was really sweet and hot. This was fantastic! :)
10/23/20, 8:40 PM
> The farming scene reminded me of a similar scene .... I got flashbacks to reading that scene as I read the opening episode. You took me to a good place with that. > Okay, that's super cool. The "seeding the field" image has been a large part of this story's make-up -- there've been dreams about it going all the way back to the early chapters of Book One. So it was really important for me that once we got to the actual, physical moment they discover that it was nothing like they thought it would be. I wanted the characters to have these kind of rapturous feelings associated with the farm so that when they find out what it really is and what it's going to do to them, they suddenly find themselves in a horror movie. But the best line of the chapter goes to Rugby Boy when he says, "“C’est la partie du film où quelque chose d’effrayant se produit.” *This is the part of the movie where something scary happens.
Anonymous
10/23/20, 8:16 PM
I keep coming back to this story, it's so amazing - thank you for writing it!
10/23/20, 8:13 PM
Another enjoyable chapter, but I had to give the army guys a side eye about leaving Devin behind. I was like, "Dude, you guys are still army; where's the whole 'no man left behind' attitude?" Glad the Lieutenant got things straightened out. Sheriff Lane selling out Kansas was rather enjoyable; just when he was going to receive another visit from Tully, he sicks her on Kansas. The farming scene reminded me of a similar scene in one of my favorite novels. In Robert McCammon's *They Thirst*, there's a scene in it where a former coffin maker is turned into a vampire and working on an assembly line. I got flashbacks to reading that scene as I read the opening episode. You took me to a good place with that.
Anonymous
10/23/20, 7:55 PM
Cool idea. The build-up was good, but I would have preferred more showing of what happened to the guys and less dialogue explicitly telling what happened.
10/23/20, 6:50 PM
Love the rimming. Really hot. I hope they get to act normal outside the house. You know going to class, attending sports, hanging out. But when they go home they are good boys for master.
10/23/20, 5:20 PM
Ohhh, that wasn't expected! Some resistance. Once Chris is around, I wonder if we'll get slice of life events?
Oct 11, 2020
10/23/20, 5:09 PM
Very hot.
Anonymous
10/23/20, 3:41 PM
This is great! Always love the stories with a bit of (hopefully) romance between two friends, and the demon touch just adds to the fun
10/23/20, 2:12 PM
> Right now, I’m reading the upcoming “war” between the two symbiote factions as a metaphor for how two of your main strengths as a writer–coming up with distinctive characters and devising plots that revolve around depersonalization/dehumanization–are going to war in this story. > I'm excited to have a deeper conversation about this, but right now it would cause SPOILERS the likes of which could shake my fragile reality to the ground! Check in with me again in chapter 18!