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Anonymous
10/23/20, 8:16 PM
I keep coming back to this story, it's so amazing - thank you for writing it!
10/23/20, 8:13 PM
Another enjoyable chapter, but I had to give the army guys a side eye about leaving Devin behind. I was like, "Dude, you guys are still army; where's the whole 'no man left behind' attitude?" Glad the Lieutenant got things straightened out. Sheriff Lane selling out Kansas was rather enjoyable; just when he was going to receive another visit from Tully, he sicks her on Kansas. The farming scene reminded me of a similar scene in one of my favorite novels. In Robert McCammon's *They Thirst*, there's a scene in it where a former coffin maker is turned into a vampire and working on an assembly line. I got flashbacks to reading that scene as I read the opening episode. You took me to a good place with that.
Anonymous
10/23/20, 7:55 PM
Cool idea. The build-up was good, but I would have preferred more showing of what happened to the guys and less dialogue explicitly telling what happened.
10/23/20, 6:50 PM
Love the rimming. Really hot. I hope they get to act normal outside the house. You know going to class, attending sports, hanging out. But when they go home they are good boys for master.
10/23/20, 5:20 PM
Ohhh, that wasn't expected! Some resistance. Once Chris is around, I wonder if we'll get slice of life events?
Oct 11, 2020
10/23/20, 5:09 PM
Very hot.
Anonymous
10/23/20, 3:41 PM
This is great! Always love the stories with a bit of (hopefully) romance between two friends, and the demon touch just adds to the fun
10/23/20, 2:12 PM
> Right now, I’m reading the upcoming “war” between the two symbiote factions as a metaphor for how two of your main strengths as a writer–coming up with distinctive characters and devising plots that revolve around depersonalization/dehumanization–are going to war in this story. > I'm excited to have a deeper conversation about this, but right now it would cause SPOILERS the likes of which could shake my fragile reality to the ground! Check in with me again in chapter 18!
10/23/20, 2:09 PM
> However, in the next chapter things will change significantly in that regard. And that'll be worth at least one load haha. > Ok, I love that everyone is referring to him as “Deputy Great One” – that’s just hysterical. \ Well, he's the Deputy, and he's going to become a Great One, and there are two Great Ones. We need to distinguish them, ya know. As far as Lane, I've always had him pegged for a heartless, coldly efficient bastard. Better to potentially sacrifice hundreds to save his own skin. I really do hope he gets some comeuppance soon.
10/23/20, 1:46 PM
> So the bonded men haven’t been stripped of their identity- the older men, anyways, > Nobody has yet, young or old -- they're just being forced to produce in the fields with negative reinforcement. However, in the next chapter things will change significantly in that regard. > seem to foreshadow that Deputy Great One is not going to be the solution that Lane seems to think he will be- I think it’s all but certain that at least one of the three will be getting enslaved > Ok, I love that everyone is referring to him as "Deputy Great One" -- that's just hysterical. I think of the Deputy more as "Frankenstein's Monster" than anything else at this point. When he comes to life, will his power be containable? The Sheriff seems to think so... > All-in-all, this was very much a set-up episode, but I can’t wait to see what happens next > I agree -- though as you look back on this chapter in retrospect, you will see it's about the passage of time, too. Ultimately, what comes out of this chapter is the Sheriff's plans laid bare. For the first time, you the readers get to see what he's truly up to -- and more, what he's willing to sacrifice to achieve his ends. I think it's pretty heartless of him to give up Kansas, honestly -- to me, that kind of raises him to the level of super-villain. So one has to question his emotional connection to any of the others. Does he really care about the Deputy, or does he just want to use the Deputy's power? Does he have any feelings for Snake, the other Alpha in the room, or is he just another tool, too? Keep reading!