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10/23/20, 1:05 PM
Huh. So the bonded men haven't been stripped of their identity- the older men, anyways, the younger men may be a different story. Mr. Lenoldi and Coach trying to stage an uprising among the adults sounds interesting, but I have a feeling that endeavor will be doomed to failure. The army boys are ready to make their move, I'm excited to see how that turns out. The tone of the scene with Snake and Rugby Boy sure does seem to foreshadow that Deputy Great One is not going to be the solution that Lane seems to think he will be- I think it's all but certain that at least one of the three will be getting enslaved. And yet again, Lane is setting up a scheme that has massive potential to blow up in his face, though I have a sneaking suspicion that Tully might wind up dead at "Murdock's" hands for her trouble. All-in-all, this was very much a set-up episode, but I can't wait to see what happens next- I've been practically vibrating with excitement all morning waiting for this to drop!
10/23/20, 12:49 PM
Right now, I'm reading the upcoming "war" between the two symbiote factions as a metaphor for how two of your main strengths as a writer--coming up with distinctive characters and devising plots that revolve around depersonalization/dehumanization--are going to war in this story. Right now, your love for your characters seems to be winning, which I can relate to as a writer. As a reader, though, I keep hoping that we'll get more scenes of depersonalization and dehumanization, from the perspective of the symbiote-controlled humans (and not just from the viewpoint of outside observers).
Martin
10/23/20, 10:44 AM
> Very hot! Should this story have the sponsored story teaser tag? This is a bit of a grey area. I'll let it pass as it can be seen as a complete and hot story, even if it's continued behind a paywall. Sponsored Stories would be required if the story were just a teaser, which is not the case here.
swngbthways
10/23/20, 4:17 AM
Now THAT'S a story! 'Love it!
swngbthways
10/23/20, 3:59 AM
I LOVE these two! I'm glad you continued with this arch! 😊
10/23/20, 1:25 AM
Very hot! Should this story have the sponsored story teaser tag?
10/23/20, 1:20 AM
I am excite :D Can't want to see how the wishes go.
10/22/20, 7:09 PM
@New Guy in Town - The ideas are percolating already. @hypnosub - Thanks man - I got hard as soon as I thought of the core idea, and then it just had to get written. I always try to find a fresh take when I can. @Jayb3369 - Thanks! I'm glad you like the line - I couldn't figure out a good way to end that section without making it *really* long, so I just left room for imagination.
JT
10/22/20, 6:01 PM
One of the hottest stories! Can't wait for the next chapter!
10/22/20, 5:30 PM
Keep the Pizza Boy series coming! Great stuff as usual!