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10/23/20, 2:12 PM
> Right now, I’m reading the upcoming “war” between the two symbiote factions as a metaphor for how two of your main strengths as a writer–coming up with distinctive characters and devising plots that revolve around depersonalization/dehumanization–are going to war in this story. > I'm excited to have a deeper conversation about this, but right now it would cause SPOILERS the likes of which could shake my fragile reality to the ground! Check in with me again in chapter 18!
10/23/20, 2:09 PM
> However, in the next chapter things will change significantly in that regard. And that'll be worth at least one load haha. > Ok, I love that everyone is referring to him as “Deputy Great One” – that’s just hysterical. \ Well, he's the Deputy, and he's going to become a Great One, and there are two Great Ones. We need to distinguish them, ya know. As far as Lane, I've always had him pegged for a heartless, coldly efficient bastard. Better to potentially sacrifice hundreds to save his own skin. I really do hope he gets some comeuppance soon.
10/23/20, 1:46 PM
> So the bonded men haven’t been stripped of their identity- the older men, anyways, > Nobody has yet, young or old -- they're just being forced to produce in the fields with negative reinforcement. However, in the next chapter things will change significantly in that regard. > seem to foreshadow that Deputy Great One is not going to be the solution that Lane seems to think he will be- I think it’s all but certain that at least one of the three will be getting enslaved > Ok, I love that everyone is referring to him as "Deputy Great One" -- that's just hysterical. I think of the Deputy more as "Frankenstein's Monster" than anything else at this point. When he comes to life, will his power be containable? The Sheriff seems to think so... > All-in-all, this was very much a set-up episode, but I can’t wait to see what happens next > I agree -- though as you look back on this chapter in retrospect, you will see it's about the passage of time, too. Ultimately, what comes out of this chapter is the Sheriff's plans laid bare. For the first time, you the readers get to see what he's truly up to -- and more, what he's willing to sacrifice to achieve his ends. I think it's pretty heartless of him to give up Kansas, honestly -- to me, that kind of raises him to the level of super-villain. So one has to question his emotional connection to any of the others. Does he really care about the Deputy, or does he just want to use the Deputy's power? Does he have any feelings for Snake, the other Alpha in the room, or is he just another tool, too? Keep reading!
10/23/20, 1:05 PM
Huh. So the bonded men haven't been stripped of their identity- the older men, anyways, the younger men may be a different story. Mr. Lenoldi and Coach trying to stage an uprising among the adults sounds interesting, but I have a feeling that endeavor will be doomed to failure. The army boys are ready to make their move, I'm excited to see how that turns out. The tone of the scene with Snake and Rugby Boy sure does seem to foreshadow that Deputy Great One is not going to be the solution that Lane seems to think he will be- I think it's all but certain that at least one of the three will be getting enslaved. And yet again, Lane is setting up a scheme that has massive potential to blow up in his face, though I have a sneaking suspicion that Tully might wind up dead at "Murdock's" hands for her trouble. All-in-all, this was very much a set-up episode, but I can't wait to see what happens next- I've been practically vibrating with excitement all morning waiting for this to drop!
10/23/20, 12:49 PM
Right now, I'm reading the upcoming "war" between the two symbiote factions as a metaphor for how two of your main strengths as a writer--coming up with distinctive characters and devising plots that revolve around depersonalization/dehumanization--are going to war in this story. Right now, your love for your characters seems to be winning, which I can relate to as a writer. As a reader, though, I keep hoping that we'll get more scenes of depersonalization and dehumanization, from the perspective of the symbiote-controlled humans (and not just from the viewpoint of outside observers).
Martin
10/23/20, 10:44 AM
> Very hot! Should this story have the sponsored story teaser tag? This is a bit of a grey area. I'll let it pass as it can be seen as a complete and hot story, even if it's continued behind a paywall. Sponsored Stories would be required if the story were just a teaser, which is not the case here.
swngbthways
10/23/20, 4:17 AM
Now THAT'S a story! 'Love it!
swngbthways
10/23/20, 3:59 AM
I LOVE these two! I'm glad you continued with this arch! 😊
10/23/20, 1:25 AM
Very hot! Should this story have the sponsored story teaser tag?
10/23/20, 1:20 AM
I am excite :D Can't want to see how the wishes go.