Firstly, in response to your comment. I honestly don't care much about Azir funny enough. I liked the two others, I think they would be fun, but I really prefer only Dennis taking on the role of super dominant top over Jese and so an NPC doing that frustrates me. That said I do like what came of it in this chapter. Okay so complete commentry. As I said, I like Dennis now directly participating in the events. But I also like the interplay between Dennis being there and not being there and how both elements are used together to great effect. I like the dragon smith using an aphrodesiac, what a nice method of getting Jese to relax and not see anything really wrong with what is going on. I also like the smith playing with Jese's bottom, so sexy. Said smith referring to the naga is very interesting and also sexy. I especially like the line "Which means, thsi cute ass of yours... loves to get filled up with a nice, long, fat, cock..." So sexy. Loved the rimming. Nice act, that and the words the smith used, very hot. The fucking was great as well. I liked how Jese was a good boy, taking it slowly and steadily. Then loosing his mind as the dragon took what was his. So that was awesome. I especially loving him loosing it, zoning out. The scenes between Dennis and Jese was glorious. I like the manipulations, I love the coaching, the urging on. The pushing but then the backing off. I also really like, just like it looks like they are about to split up, the whole quest about the mount going off. Soo cool. I do wish there was more hanky panky while riding on the mount, maybe a bit of butt rub or accidental butt in face or something. hehe The dragon stuff was very interesting. Well mostly that is. I liked the submission of Jese. While I am very very glad you did not even attempt to make Dennis submit (so glad on that) I am kind of sad that Dennis didn't actually get to take a sort of dominant position either against Jese or that dragon. The smith coming to the rescue was interesting. I wish it had been Dennis somehow but the smith was a nice system event point. I am sad about Jese's mount actually, especially as it was from the regular game. I really do wish Dennis had managed to save him. In fact, this bothers me. Cause Dennis saving the mount would have given him an even bigger inroad into supporting Jese. So yeah, good mega chapter. Love the comments and the sex and the rimming. Love the submission. Loved Dennis taking control and commenting on about a dude from the past (true or not doesn't matter, the story makes Jese listen). I do wish there was more Dennis on Jese actions, especially when Jese was a bit out of it. Like maybe if Jese had put on the bottoms and such and Dennis looked at them and his butt. Or while they were hiding from the dragon Dennis was able to grope Jese a bit, maybe in an attempt to keep him from going towards the dragon. And yeah, I wish the mount was saved. All in all very good. Sexy. Lots of fun. Love the game system.

great story, can't wait for more

Round 2? Yes please!! And maybe a round 3 and 4 and so on. Loved it

@revenge Doing me best!! <3 I think I have one more of these chapters to set up follow ups, then I have a very important/special story I have promised for a friend. Star World has been sort of a prep for the style and what not, but I did get into it, so wanted to give it a proper arc ending. @Elmara Thank you thank you~ Especially for the long comment! First off, I think I messed up somewhere along the way with the armor description. The blacksmith made him a jockstrap for under his armor, but since the armor was based on the warrior armor, there is loin cloths covering his front and back. Fortunately, such an oufit could easily reveal what it is hiding underneath. But in the end, I like to keep my stories somewhat simple so that you can fill in lots of blanks to imagine the world as you see fit. I try to balance a line between slut and not slut. We need to ease the straight boy into his misfortunes!! And I definitely have more misfortunes for him ahead. I think Star World, and its console, provides for infinite opportunities for Jese to get in trouble. An early idea for the chapter was to have Dennis force Jese into some sort of quest that would have a much stronger gay focus. Like Jese having to pretend Dennis was his boyfriend to infiltrate a club or something more fantasy based on that concept, in which the final bad guy would abuse this made up connection to make Jese do things. However, I wanted to keep that fun for next chapter. But trust me, the excuse will come. I do like the cursed armor idea, and things of that sort. I'd love for Jese to wake up with cursed bottoms or something. That would be hot. I do feel like his focus on leveling and grinding for his top guild will take a hit in the next few months, haha. SO yeah, always love comments and suggestions, thanks for chatting! If you have anything more, please spit it out! Or email me <3 @Heru Kane No rush, but I do look forward to the comments. I suppose Dennis versus the NPCs really changes the dynamic of the chapter. Jese having to deal with growing feelings for gay NPCs, versus the stress of being around someone who knows him in real life. And the double stress of that person being someone who could do these "evil" things with him in real life. While always being completely unaware that Dennis is grooming him, or at least just messing with him. Like, does he love Master Azir? How powerful is that bond, that he has been kept from since the start of his misfortunes. But yeah, looking forward to more discussion with you. @Hypnoguy67 Glad you're enjoying it!! <3

Great start! I look forward to seeing where this goes, and what the limits of the book are. As for cleaning up more, and wearing less, I know I'd love a maid in his underwear and an apron dusting in some hard-to-reach corners. So good job!

Love your work! Your detailed descriptions are hot and understandable even to non-gamers. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Absolutely amazing. This is such a great story. Perfectly paced and masterful exposition - I feel like I'm in the story with them. Cannot wait to read more!

i love it!! cant wait for more!! was hayden aware he fucked himself for 12 hrs? can we see his reaction?

Omg this story is so hot. Would be amazing to follow Luke, for a whole day. His “sickness” getting worse. Him being around his brother, Manny, the coach, other boys on his team....

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