Round 2? Yes please!! And maybe a round 3 and 4 and so on. Loved it

@revenge Doing me best!! <3 I think I have one more of these chapters to set up follow ups, then I have a very important/special story I have promised for a friend. Star World has been sort of a prep for the style and what not, but I did get into it, so wanted to give it a proper arc ending. @Elmara Thank you thank you~ Especially for the long comment! First off, I think I messed up somewhere along the way with the armor description. The blacksmith made him a jockstrap for under his armor, but since the armor was based on the warrior armor, there is loin cloths covering his front and back. Fortunately, such an oufit could easily reveal what it is hiding underneath. But in the end, I like to keep my stories somewhat simple so that you can fill in lots of blanks to imagine the world as you see fit. I try to balance a line between slut and not slut. We need to ease the straight boy into his misfortunes!! And I definitely have more misfortunes for him ahead. I think Star World, and its console, provides for infinite opportunities for Jese to get in trouble. An early idea for the chapter was to have Dennis force Jese into some sort of quest that would have a much stronger gay focus. Like Jese having to pretend Dennis was his boyfriend to infiltrate a club or something more fantasy based on that concept, in which the final bad guy would abuse this made up connection to make Jese do things. However, I wanted to keep that fun for next chapter. But trust me, the excuse will come. I do like the cursed armor idea, and things of that sort. I'd love for Jese to wake up with cursed bottoms or something. That would be hot. I do feel like his focus on leveling and grinding for his top guild will take a hit in the next few months, haha. SO yeah, always love comments and suggestions, thanks for chatting! If you have anything more, please spit it out! Or email me <3 @Heru Kane No rush, but I do look forward to the comments. I suppose Dennis versus the NPCs really changes the dynamic of the chapter. Jese having to deal with growing feelings for gay NPCs, versus the stress of being around someone who knows him in real life. And the double stress of that person being someone who could do these "evil" things with him in real life. While always being completely unaware that Dennis is grooming him, or at least just messing with him. Like, does he love Master Azir? How powerful is that bond, that he has been kept from since the start of his misfortunes. But yeah, looking forward to more discussion with you. @Hypnoguy67 Glad you're enjoying it!! <3

Great start! I look forward to seeing where this goes, and what the limits of the book are. As for cleaning up more, and wearing less, I know I'd love a maid in his underwear and an apron dusting in some hard-to-reach corners. So good job!

Love your work! Your detailed descriptions are hot and understandable even to non-gamers. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Absolutely amazing. This is such a great story. Perfectly paced and masterful exposition - I feel like I'm in the story with them. Cannot wait to read more!

i love it!! cant wait for more!! was hayden aware he fucked himself for 12 hrs? can we see his reaction?

Omg this story is so hot. Would be amazing to follow Luke, for a whole day. His “sickness” getting worse. Him being around his brother, Manny, the coach, other boys on his team....

welcome back

This is very hot. What happened to the other fighters?

Very imaginative use of the book. Thanks for writing. Hope to see more experimentation.