Recent Comments

10/21/20, 1:53 PM
Great start! I look forward to seeing where this goes, and what the limits of the book are. As for cleaning up more, and wearing less, I know I'd love a maid in his underwear and an apron dusting in some hard-to-reach corners. So good job!
10/21/20, 1:36 PM
Love your work! Your detailed descriptions are hot and understandable even to non-gamers. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Anonymous
10/21/20, 11:12 AM
Absolutely amazing. This is such a great story. Perfectly paced and masterful exposition - I feel like I'm in the story with them. Cannot wait to read more!
10/21/20, 10:41 AM
i love it!! cant wait for more!! was hayden aware he fucked himself for 12 hrs? can we see his reaction?
Anonymous
10/21/20, 10:34 AM
Omg this story is so hot. Would be amazing to follow Luke, for a whole day. His “sickness” getting worse. Him being around his brother, Manny, the coach, other boys on his team....
10/21/20, 9:57 AM
welcome back
10/21/20, 9:34 AM
This is very hot. What happened to the other fighters?
Evan
10/21/20, 7:47 AM
Very imaginative use of the book. Thanks for writing. Hope to see more experimentation.
hypnosub
10/21/20, 4:54 AM
everyone in the comments has said it already, but wow this story is truly phenomenal! i've read pretty much all of your dumbing down stories and this one takes the cake - which is an impressive feat given the stuff you've written. this is such a clever way to use the dumbing down kink and to reimagine it in a way that's fun to read but also interesting to analyze (unlike kyle, who probably can't analyze anything now lol). this is seriously an amazing story and if there was a gay erotica award you would deserve it!
10/21/20, 4:09 AM
this chapter was so good. i really enjoy mr brady enjoying a golden shower.