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10/21/20, 3:55 AM
Wow, what a long chapter. :) Now, don't get me wrong, this is great, its just that due to its length I am going to need a few days to actually take it all in. So expect a longer comment later on. That said, the idea of Dennis in the game is awesome. I love how he is blatent and yet not, in such a way that Jese thinks nothing of it. I also like the clothing, especially the fact that Dennis can see Jese's ass, that's a nice touch. Hope lots of moments occur that lead to groping and fingering and maybe butt near face, with Jese coming to like it from Dennis more and more. While the other NPCs were cool, and I like how Jese wants to save the two, I like Dennis in it more. That's all I have so far, will need to read more. Awesome so far. :)
10/21/20, 3:42 AM
Wow, man, what a phenomenal chapter! And so long too, I absolutely loved it! It was so hot! I really enjoyed Dennis playing alongside Jese, I think I like this better than him as the master of the game, cause this way he can actually be there seeing Jese go through all this sexy gay stuff and act like an impartial third party when he's actually the one doing everything! This is super hot! I also loved how you made Jese's new armor super slutty, with only a jockstrap as pants! This is so fucking hot, shit! I can't wait to see Jese in this new armor, exposing his ass all the time. I would love if Jese keeps getting into embarrasing situations when he is with that armour, always exposing his ass and tight hole to Dennis, on accident or by being oblivious to it, to then just realize what he had been doing and get super embarrassed by it, thinking that Dennis was seeing his hole! This would be supremely hot. Like an ecchi manga, with lots of fanservice for Dennis and us :) and it would be incredible if Dennis could somehow manipulate the game to make this slutty armour Jese's permanent outfit, like with a curse or something, and he can't change it until he finishes a quest or whatever. That would be so hot! I really loved the scene where Jese had to sit on Dennis lap so they could fly to retrieve the mounts. I love those kinds of scenes with lots of sexual tension and innuendo so please keep it up! I also think it would be awesome if Jese and Dennis somehow had to fuck inside the game in order to complete a mission or quest, thus giving Jese a perfectly good excuse to get fucked by Dennis without coming out or something like that. Anyway man, I absolutey loved this chapter and I can't wait to read more, good job! Hope you liked the suggestions and that a new chapter comes up soon! Cheers, well done!
revenge
10/21/20, 3:28 AM
missed your stories, man. cant wait to read this chapter
Jason
10/21/20, 3:22 AM
I can't wait to read the continued progress of your story.
10/21/20, 3:18 AM
Excited for more.
10/21/20, 2:42 AM
@Derek Williams: I look forward to seeing what you can do with dumbing down yet autonomous story.
10/21/20, 1:07 AM
Hot start! I'm looking forward to the next part.
10/20/20, 11:49 PM
I enjoyed your concept of "nothing" and how you brought it about. Then shooting away their very selves. And then All conquers nothing. Well done. (the kamikaze driver was a bit dark)
10/20/20, 10:56 PM
Well. I loved it. It was a perfect amount of struggle on the part of the victim. And the illustration of exactly how powerful and conniving Mark actually was in that moment, when he pinned him and started go to ham was well done. It felt genuine that Todd barely could keep struggling in the face of that much determination because even I was like, "Damn dude you really pulled this off, you got me." It also felt like Mark had some genuine motivations and justification, though unfortunately now that he's like 13", it feels like his personality has been distorted into a somewhat cruel level. I don't think 9" Mark was planning to make Todd a pass-around-sub, I think Mark just wanted someone for himself. But it's entirely consistent with the writing that he's distorted himself in the process of trying to capture Todd. Though, at 9" Mark wouldn't have really scared most guys off but now he is genuinely freakish. And he may think he'll be the star of a sex party; maybe he will. But I think that crowing about a 13" cock being popular is more the mental distortion talking. I think he's going to scare off guys unless they're already extremely submissive and into extreme assplay. So if he gets bored and wants to rail someone other than Todd? He might have to give up a couple inches to someone else "temporarily". It would be interesting if that provides a chance for Todd to escape or at least get back to normal. Probably not. ;)
10/20/20, 10:49 PM
Thank you. More to cum 😅