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10/20/20, 10:56 PM
Well. I loved it. It was a perfect amount of struggle on the part of the victim. And the illustration of exactly how powerful and conniving Mark actually was in that moment, when he pinned him and started go to ham was well done. It felt genuine that Todd barely could keep struggling in the face of that much determination because even I was like, "Damn dude you really pulled this off, you got me." It also felt like Mark had some genuine motivations and justification, though unfortunately now that he's like 13", it feels like his personality has been distorted into a somewhat cruel level. I don't think 9" Mark was planning to make Todd a pass-around-sub, I think Mark just wanted someone for himself. But it's entirely consistent with the writing that he's distorted himself in the process of trying to capture Todd. Though, at 9" Mark wouldn't have really scared most guys off but now he is genuinely freakish. And he may think he'll be the star of a sex party; maybe he will. But I think that crowing about a 13" cock being popular is more the mental distortion talking. I think he's going to scare off guys unless they're already extremely submissive and into extreme assplay. So if he gets bored and wants to rail someone other than Todd? He might have to give up a couple inches to someone else "temporarily". It would be interesting if that provides a chance for Todd to escape or at least get back to normal. Probably not. ;)
10/20/20, 10:49 PM
Thank you. More to cum 😅
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10/20/20, 10:05 PM
Have to say I wasn’t a huge fan of the intro - dealing with the grief of a dead loved one isn’t really a turn on. But once you got into the meat of the story I found myself really enjoying things and you did a great job of framing things in the historical setting
10/20/20, 9:45 PM
Please keep going! Off to a really great start.
10/20/20, 8:57 PM
this was so HOT!!
10/20/20, 8:26 PM
amazing start! can't wait to read more!
10/20/20, 7:48 PM
Keep going
10/20/20, 7:27 PM
great
10/20/20, 6:11 PM
My fantasy is almost this. Difference is I am having coffee and the man joins me uninvited at the table.
10/20/20, 3:52 PM
@New Guy In Town - Thanks! The use of the word 'metaphor' in this story was a bit of a stab at the faux intellectualism that can surround literary criticism, and yeah, it was intentionally misused. It sounds like a fun challenge to try and write a dumbing down story where the subject keeps autonomy and control... I'll put that in the idea folder. As for your idea folder, your meta story sounds fun. I hope you write it! @MonsterMash62 - Extreme Changeover where I learned what I call 'transformation in stages'. It's not just one moment, but a whole set of steps that lets us explore how the character feels as each aspect of themselves is changed. It's had a tremendous impact on my writing, and that's why I picked it to include. Plus it's damn hot. I sort of pair it with this picture in my head: http://musclejocks.blogspot.com/2009/07/muscle-jocks-of-day.html?m=1 @SubMuscleGuy - Thanks! As soon as I thought "What if there was a class that dissected dumbing down and it brought you along for the ride" I couldn't help but write it. There are so many great stories under the 'dumber' tag that it was hard to pick just a few. @MeddlerIncs - Thanks! I feel like I'm standing on the shoulders of giants with this one. @JockPupTraxxx - Aw, thanks man. I love when people like my work enough to comment on it. I'm basically a slut for praise, without the comments I doubt I'd write.