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AgingAthlete
10/19/20, 12:53 AM
Great story, fascinating concept, well-written. Just a tad unbelievable. I'd like to see Jeremy just a bit less of a flamer and more of a cub.
Swizzington
10/18/20, 11:50 PM
I briefly considered entering this into the Halloween challenge but decided it would be too much of a stretch. But fear not, for I have another story in the works, written just for said challenge! Thanks for the feedback. I agree. I didn't do a good enough job signposting the fact that, actually, Dr. Humble had started reprogramming Justice Boy's mind from the very instant their eyes first locked. He had been working away in the background of the poor hero's brain the entire time! When it came to pushing the point home, Justice Boy was already pretty far gone. I intended for this story to be short and simple, and was concerned it might get a bit too 'info-dumpy', if you know what I mean. Especially because I intend on writing another, longer story involving Dr. Humble in future :-)
10/18/20, 11:17 PM
this could have possibly fit to the halloween challenge with the demon's presence, but no complaints here! I ADORE your work, and the only feedback is to somewhat echo Transformheaven and lament we didn't get a a slightly more drawn out subverting with most of our poor super friends. I DID appreciate that from the start Justice Boy was locked in with the eye contact, and totally unsuspecting, but when it came to actively breaking his will, I feel like the editing floor robbed us of some good bits. A more thorough recollection by Mr. Humble about how he got started in the chicken business, his first encounters with Crimson Fist and Wiz Kid and how he came about to the conclusion to make their jizz into his secret sauce by experimenting with the regular workers, and such? Heck, both parties acknowledged that this was going to be a villainous monologue! Humble could have gone to town. In general, I am just happy we got more of your work, but still want more of your work. ha!
10/18/20, 10:33 PM
I bet the the story will end with the dragon taking over the kingdom
10/18/20, 9:58 PM
That was a very inspired story. I liked how much it put me in the time-period while still maintaining an MC theme.
10/18/20, 9:23 PM
I think the beam will be repropused into a lust inducing beam
10/18/20, 9:11 PM
YES! suited mindfucked chicken top ticks all my boxes
10/18/20, 9:04 PM
Love this so much.
10/18/20, 8:49 PM
Looking forward to seeing other jocks get it. Hehe
Oct 11, 2020
10/18/20, 6:44 PM
no lie this is the best one I've ever read on here